Many people believe that government takes responsibility for the increase in children's obesity. Considering this opinion, I suppose that government is only a minor factor, but the major one is the awareness of both children and parents. Therefore, I totally disagree with this viewpoint and will discuss it in the coming essay.
First and foremost, the government may somewhat contribute to obesity in children, but does not take all the responsibility for this issue. That said some policies on unhealthy food implemented by the government are often not stringent enough, which can not deter children from consuming and get overweight. However, it is unreasonable as parents can teach children about the negative impacts of junk food or fast food and forbid them if necessary. Furthermore, the government is also blamed for not have enough education campaigns about obesity for the kids. Nevertheless, it is difficult to guarantee that all children will pay attention and follow the given advice. Thus, the more attempts the government try, the more unprofitable they are if children are not aware.
This led to the second thesis that children and their parents are responsible for their overweight condition. Every human is born with a body and must take serious duty in protecting their body from dangerous things. For this reason, parents need to take their children's diet into account and gradually inform them about healthy and nutritious food and the massive benefits they bring. With the close instruction of the parents, children can easily be aware of a healthy lifestyle, this way, they will commit to this positive lifestyle and refrain from consuming unhealthy food. Thus, obesity in children might remarkably dwindle.
In conclusion, the government is only a minor contributor to children's overweight issue but the major one is the edification of children about obesity and healthy lifestyle raised by their parents.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 632, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y in children might remarkably dwindle. In conclusion, the government is only a ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, thus, i suppose, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2996742671 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82722271083 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527687296417 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2799637927 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.466666667 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227060995645 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887714440061 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550383893991 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15168125009 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472031330535 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 632, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y in children might remarkably dwindle. In conclusion, the government is only a ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, thus, i suppose, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2996742671 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82722271083 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527687296417 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2799637927 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.466666667 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227060995645 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887714440061 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550383893991 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15168125009 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472031330535 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.