Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football. But others think taking part in individual sports is better, like swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Opinion is divided as to whether participating in team sports has more benefits than individual ones. Both views have their own powerful/good arguments and they are going to be elaborated on in this essay.
On the one hand, the major advantage of participating in sports which are played in teams is that athletes can form strong bonds among themselves and even with others socially. While practicing and competing in a team, teammates have to set a common goal in mind which is to achieve victory for the whole team. This goal can only be fulfilled if there is understanding, empathy and selflessness among team members. And when they have possessed such great qualities, they could definitely apply them in any area in society to attain accomplishments. According to the survey conducted by a reputable newspaper in 2019, 84% of interviewees who were either amateur or professional team sportsmen revealed that they could maintain good relationships with their team members and be socially active in off-field time.
On the other hand, one of the main reasons why some are keen on taking up an individual sport is because of the high level of concentration and determination it can bring to participants. Unlike team sports where players may rely on each other for support, athletes in individual sports have to continuously motivate themselves to keep practicing and aiming for the highest position. Through that process, they have formed self-discipline and an unwavering will and it is undeniably useful when they have to be faced with any hardship in life.
In conclusion, both types of sports can bring huge benefits to those who are willing to take up any of them. In my opinion, it does not matter which sports to choose, what is more significant is people are able to pursue a sport they like or have a passion for so as to gain pleasure, better health or hard-earned success.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
Opinion is divided as to whether participating in team sports has more b...
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Line 2, column 352, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...his goal can only be fulfilled if there is understanding, empathy and selflessness among team me...
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Line 4, column 261, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...a sport they like or have a passion for so as to gain pleasure, better health or hard-ea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, while, as to, in conclusion, in my opinion, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1574.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94968553459 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94188398501 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578616352201 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.3034819595 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.166666667 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234924999063 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885144583643 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645228803131 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159126694539 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520800441585 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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