Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
One of the most important differences between the human-being and other creatures is sensation and the ability to select what to does. Animals do their works due to their instinct, and they cannot decide what their tendencies are in the current time. However, people like to follow their interests, and do the things what they like. But, in this new modern era, spending time on doing favors has become as an action without any profit, and most people condemn it. They believe that human have to earn money and imply that a person who has the ability to earn more money is a successful person, no matter whether he likes his work or not. However, some experts state that this matter is not true and spending time for the favorite affair is necessary. I definitely think that human is made to enjoy his life, not being on a hard pressure. In this topic, I will delve into two main reasons.
The first reason, which I want to speak is about the personal feeling. If someone does not enjoy from the work his does, he would become upset and cannot do his responsibility correctly. This issue effects his life and can make him a useless person in the work environment. For example, in Japan, a study has recently shown that Japanese worker have had more tendency of suicide due to hard working and not having free time.
Secondly, I think caring about favorites would make a happier society, and this issue increases mental diseases. Mental sicknesses, specifically depression, has become the most widespread problem in the whole world. But if people pay attention about their interests, they would have healthier brain, and this issue will make a better society. For instance, I have a cousin, named Elahe, Who had suffered from severe depression in several years. But two years ago, she has started to learn playing piano due to a famous psychologist's advice. The psychologist suggest her to do a favorite action, instead of just studying in the university. He didn't prescript any drug and stated that doing interests is the most beneficial drug for her. During two years ago till now, her mental condition has definitely changed. She always suggest other people, who suffer from mental problem to do favorite action instead of make themselves dependent to medicines.
In conclusion, I think although financial issues have become more serious in these recent years, and forced people to work harder and more than before, but spending time for enjoyable actions can make a person healthier and let him to do his best in his job. This matter is not my point of view only, the recent researches have proved this too.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 298, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...ork environment. For example, in Japan, a research has recently shown that Japanese worker...
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Line 5, column 490, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to play'.
Suggestion: to play
...two years ago, she has started to learn playing piano due to a famous psychologists adv...
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Line 5, column 520, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'psychologists'' or 'psychologist's'?
Suggestion: psychologists'; psychologist's
... to learn playing piano due to a famous psychologists advice. The psychologist suggest her to...
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Line 5, column 643, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... of just studying in the university. He didnt prescript any drug and stated that doin...
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Line 5, column 824, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
...tion has definitely changed. She always suggest other people, who suffer from mental pr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2175.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83333333333 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47538898303 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524444444444 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3467516891 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5652173913 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5652173913 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17391304348 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225992965479 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655153242882 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797503686334 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140768985295 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559304049166 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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