Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination, while other think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People have always been captivated by what makes people's achievements. While I agree that materials wealth and good-appearance are essential, I believe that diligence and persistence are more significant.
Firstly, It is can not deny that physical appearance and money play a vital role in attaining achievements. For those who were born in affluent families typically have a good foundation for their development and prosperity. For example, they effortlessly make use of their wealth inherited from their parents to start their own business and success, such as Bill Gates. On beside, physical appearance could affect to the first impressions. Especially, for people want to work in entertainment, fashion, or in beauty industries. For instance, in Korea to became a famous single, not only have a good voices, but also have attractive body and gorgeous beauty.
Secondly, without determined and persistence people are likely never reach the pinnacle of their career. Not everyone fortunate enough to be born in wealthy families or to be beautiful, but by putting a great deal of effort they could achieve their goals. Take Jack Ma for an noticeable example, he was born in a poor family, but by his diligence and hard working he became the richest man in China and also accomplished Alibaba company, Which is one of the ten top largest the world cryptocurrency company . The other reasons, major success seldom comes easily without perseverance. As Thomas Edison , a well-know inventor, who conducted countless experiments and failed thousands of times before eventually inventing the working light bulb.
In conclusion, despite of beauty and money are essential to people's success, I completely agree that the role of being hard work and persistent is far more crucial.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2021-12-21 | thuylinh15 | 84 | view |
- People aim to achieve the balance between their work and lives But few people achieve it What are the causes of problems How to overcome it 73
- Many people put their personal information online address telephone number and so on for purposes such as signing up for social networks or online banking Is this a positive or negative development 89
- Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination while other think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance Discuss both views and give your opinion 84
- People aim to achieve the balance between their work and lives But few people achieve it What are the causes of problems How to overcome it 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'materials'' or 'material's'?
Suggestion: materials'; material's
...eoples achievements. While I agree that materials wealth and good-appearance are essentia...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 407, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es. On beside, physical appearance could affect to the first impressions. Especi...
^^
Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...physical appearance could affect to the first impressions. Especially, for peopl...
^^
Line 3, column 661, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve attractive body and gorgeous beauty. Secondly, without determined and persist...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 274, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...d achieve their goals. Take Jack Ma for an noticeable example, he was born in a po...
^^
Line 5, column 507, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...largest the world cryptocurrency company . The other reasons, major success seldom...
^^
Line 5, column 601, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...y without perseverance. As Thomas Edison , a well-know inventor, who conducted cou...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32269503546 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99600300751 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631205673759 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8197259143 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.214285714 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161746863362 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561123551603 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445904158912 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110529367931 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345675253883 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.