some people think that work is the most important thing of people s life Without the success of career life will become meaningless To what extent do you agree or disagree

In an extremely competitive world, occupational achievement is considered to be the most pivotal and brings meaning to people’s lives. However, in my opinion, I partially agree with this statement for several reasons.
On the one hand, I believe that careers play a prominent role in one’s life. Normally, people ease to work from their 20s to early 60s, which accounts for a third of their lifetime. Therefore, a worthwhile job that blooms would boost worker self-achievement and fill their human well-being. By contrast, an unstable, turbulent career or experience of job dissatisfaction could have detrimental destructive influences on employee mental and physical health by having chronic stress, cardiovascular diseases, and so on…In addition, those with an unsuccessful career often have negative thinkings about life and self-harm actions. For example, in Japan, the number of suicide due to workplace stress is escalating annually.
On the other hand, I also think that there are more desirable goals in life than a career. A major of people who devoted their lives to improving the environment, supporting those in need, or saving abandoned animals without receiving any payments or promotions, yet still, contend with their life. Furthermore, there are thousands of people who do not enter the workforce but remain satisfied with their life. For instance, in a myriad of Eastern countries, instead of working, numerous women spend most of their lives staying at home and taking care of children and are still happy with what they have.
In conclusion, the importance of an outstanding career is inevitable, however, it is not the only way prompt to life fulfillment because there is a deluge of ways to allow people to achieve a happy life.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, still, therefore, third, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27046263345 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98128473344 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651245551601 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.790055036 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.416666667 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4166666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.8333333333 7.06120827912 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247579729402 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858385238352 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595599018919 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147326878789 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046568901027 0.056905535591 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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