The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
For 50 years, the position of women has converted a great deal in societies, but societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality. I agree that culture and political will are the main problem.
Culture is a problem to achieve sex equality in societies, because people have a tendency to follow their ancestor saying that men position is above women. Putting more simply, their predecessor teaches them to put women in the kitchen or household or just pregnant and breeding. For example, in East Java, one of the biggest province in Indonesia, women have an obligation to cook, wash and clean the house and stay at home to take care their children.
Furthermore, there is no political will from the government to solve the problem. The government often limit access for women to participate in political action. There is no law to give women more opportunity to join in the election, thus women often in the unlucky position in the competition. It means that women cannot change the regulation limiting their capabilities and freedom. For example, in Indonesia politic, women become have minority in government and parliament. It is not providing the capacities for women to change their destinies by changing the regulation.
In conclusion, I believe that culture and political will from the government are the main problem in many societies to achieve the gender equality for 50 years. Where possible, the government have to change the regulation to give affirmative action for women to sit in government or parliament.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'converted'.
Suggestion: converted
...For 50 years, the position of women has convert a great deal in societies, but societie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, so, thus, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1286.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1235059761 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80427150391 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505976095618 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9203731698 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9230769231 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3076923077 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259745307239 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102018215539 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103732240472 0.0667982634062 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19708456538 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104945686346 0.056905535591 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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