Nowadays some older people choose to live in retirement communities with other older people, rather than living with their adult children. Is it a positive or negative development?
As society is advancing by leaps and bounds, the way people live has undergone a noticeable and far-reaching transformation. Under this circumstance, an absolute consensus can hardly be reached as to whether the older generation should live in retirement homes instead of living with their own children. For my part, I aside with the advocates to a large extent based on following sound reasons.
Firstly, it is vital to recognize that the older people get, the more likely they are to develop a slew of medical issues such as diabetes, cardiovascular disease, brain dysfunction, or cancer, among others. Many sociological studies have shown that although it is invisible, being afflicted with a chronic disease necessitates the use of medications as well as frequent medical check-ups and, on occasion, specific treatments. Therefore, it will be a grave mistake to overlook the fact that taking care of the senior's health requires a significant amount of time and effort. For example, according to statistics, in numerous developed countries, the authorities place a high value on providing the infrastructure of nursing homes or aged care centers with qualified health professionals and cutting-edge technology. This example is the illustration of the fact that the physical condition of retirees will be improved.
Secondly, the counter-argument raised by opponents to this is that when the elderly are separated from their families and do not have children, it is easy for them to feel lonely and depressed. This argument is true to some extent; however, it is incomplete, what they fail to take into account is the fact that they are desperate for social connections, as their children must work all day and have no free time for them. In this case, telling examples include exercise classes, musical events, and featured programs celebrated so that citizens can find empathy and make friends with those whom they share an interest. From this example, one can observe that the level of social activity will be increased, and entertaining ways for seniors to socialize will be provided.
In conclusion, it is my opinion that people in nursing homes who are retired and do not live with adult children have brought more benefits than drawbacks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...bsolute consensus can hardly be reached as to whether the older generation should live in ret...
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Line 2, column 511, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'seniors'' or 'senior's'?
Suggestion: seniors'; senior's
...erlook the fact that taking care of the seniors health necessitates a significant amoun...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21428571429 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99841462759 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596153846154 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.9138632685 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.0 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244716550433 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830518623415 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0858950006858 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178720066169 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0948338826252 0.056905535591 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.97 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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