When Ida McAllister ran for mayor of Lake City four years ago, she failed to win even 30 percent of the vote. But since then, McAllister has made public her commitment to environmental causes. She would be wise, therefore, to announce her intention to close all Lake City parks to automobile traffic, thus following the example of the former mayor of Plainsville, Alecia Yu. On the recommendation of a small group of concerned citizens, Mayor Yu prohibited automobile traffic in all Plainsville parks, and therefore was credited with solving the pollution problem and improving the quality of life in Plainsville. This action would have great appeal to the citizens of Lake City, most of whom participate in the community’s recycling program, and would guarantee McAllister’s success in her current quest to be Lake City’s new mayor
The given argument concludes that it would be a wise decision forIda McAllister to announce her decision to prohibit automobile traffic to all Lake City Parks in accordance with her commitment to environmental causes. The arguree concedes that this action would ensure that Ida MacAllister wins the forthcoming elections to the mayor of Lake City Despite teh fact that she had lost by huge margin during the elections for the same post 4 years ago. The arguer cities the example of the former mayor of Plainsville, Alecia Yu, who had implemneted similar restrictions in Plainsville as a result of which she had earned appreciation for solving pollution problems and improving the lifestyles of the people of Plainville. The arguer further states that the people of Lake City would find this action appealing as most of them participate in the community's recycling program as well. However, the argument is found to be lacking in several respects and it fails to convince the reader that action being suggested by arguer would indeed be a awise one for Ida McAllister.
The arguer completely sidelines other factors which might influence the votes of the citizens of Lake City. It is likely the environmental factors come last in the priority list of citizens whe it comes to voting for a suitable mayor for their town. There is a possibility that the citizens of Lake City are looking for a mayor who can provide economic reforms, create employment, improve the educational system in the city, facilitate construction of badly neede civic amenities etc. Therefore, it is unlikely that they will vote for mayor whose agenda is environmental issues.
On the contrary, it is highly possible that action suggested by the arguer might boomerang and result in loss of votes for Ida McAllister. This is because Plainsville and Lake City are two cities which differ in geographical and demographical make up. It is likely that the parks in Plainville are built in a smaller area as compared to the ones in Lake City. Therefore, the automobiles driving into the Plainville parks created traffic issues and parking problems. Hence the decision to ban the automobiles in the park was widely appreciated by the citizens of Plainville. The same cannot be true for the Lake City in view of inadequete information provided by the arguer. It is likely that the parks in Lake City are far away from the city and they are drive-in parks. Suggesting the restriction of movement of automobile within the parks may lead to public outcry, thereby having an adverse effect which would be the opposite to what was being speculated.
Lastly, the fact that most of the citizens of Lake City actively participate in the community's recycling program does not necessarily mean that they all are environmental enthusiasts who are concerned about pollution related problems. It is likely that they are interested in recycling due to some monetary benefits that may be involved in the recycling program.
In conclusion, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. The argument could have been strengthened by providing evidence that proved that Lake City is plagued by pollution problems and that the citizens of Lake City will largely benefit from the action that has been recommended, thereby affecting the vote bank of Ida McAllister in the run for the town's mayor. Moreover, there is a need to discuss and eliminate tje factors, other than environmental causes, that will determine wht the people are looking for in their mayor.
- the benefits of technology come at a price increasing dependence will result in an overall weakening of human abilities 50
- technology is weakening human abilities 66
- When Ida McAllister ran for mayor of Lake City four years ago she failed to win even 30 percent of the vote But since then McAllister has made public her commitment to environmental causes She would be wise therefore to announce her intention to close all 66
- the benefits of technology come at a price increasing dependence will result in an overall weakening of human abilities 50
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 450, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lections for the same post 4 years ago. The arguer cities the example of the former...
^^^
Line 1, column 721, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lifestyles of the people of Plainville. The arguer further states that the people o...
^^^
Line 1, column 1037, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ing suggested by arguer would indeed be a awise one for Ida McAllister. The argu...
^
Line 3, column 466, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ed traffic issues and parking problems. Hence the decision to ban the automobiles in ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'towns'' or 'town's'?
Suggestion: towns'; town's
...nk of Ida McAllister in the run for the towns mayor. Moreover, there is a need to dis...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, lastly, look, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 28.0 13.6137724551 206% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2928.0 2260.96107784 130% => OK
No of words: 580.0 441.139720559 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04827586207 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82829259469 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 204.123752495 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455172413793 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 944.1 705.55239521 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6176932503 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.090909091 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3636363636 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68181818182 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28193771702 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776317868092 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616129287189 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149397875685 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0818083514749 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 98.500998004 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 450, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lections for the same post 4 years ago. The arguer cities the example of the former...
^^^
Line 1, column 721, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lifestyles of the people of Plainville. The arguer further states that the people o...
^^^
Line 1, column 1037, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ing suggested by arguer would indeed be a awise one for Ida McAllister. The argu...
^
Line 3, column 466, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ed traffic issues and parking problems. Hence the decision to ban the automobiles in ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'towns'' or 'town's'?
Suggestion: towns'; town's
...nk of Ida McAllister in the run for the towns mayor. Moreover, there is a need to dis...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, lastly, look, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 28.0 13.6137724551 206% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2928.0 2260.96107784 130% => OK
No of words: 580.0 441.139720559 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04827586207 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82829259469 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 204.123752495 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455172413793 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 944.1 705.55239521 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6176932503 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.090909091 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3636363636 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68181818182 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28193771702 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776317868092 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616129287189 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149397875685 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0818083514749 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 98.500998004 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.