The graph below shows the amount of electricity produced from different energy sources to supply the city of New York between 1980 and 2000

The line graph depicts the quantity of electricity created from 3 sources of energy to serve people of NewYork from 1980 to 2000.
It can be considered that the amount of energy used on natural gas grew significantly over the period shown. Where as, the production of petroleum saw a highest quantity in each year shown.
In 1980, petroleum was pruduced most in NewYork, at about 350 million kWh, then it turned to be surged dramatically in the next 5 years, by around 250 million kWh. 5 years later, the creation of this sources stood at the same quantity for the 1980’s, and it increased significantly to the end of 2000, reach a peak of 710 million kWh.
The amount of natural gas made in NY started at about 100 million kWh and still kept remain unchangedin 1985. However, the natural gases energy was used more and more, the figure of this energy climbed considerably, end at about 500 million kWh. By contrast, the coal energy production in New York increase mimimally in 5 years begin, and then there was a slight fall in the number of coal energy, end at the lowest figure, at about 200 million kWh

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 109, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Whereas'?
Suggestion: Whereas
...ew significantly over the period shown. Where as, the production of petroleum saw a high...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 151, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...ere as, the production of petroleum saw a highest quantity in each year shown. I...
^
Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ion kWh. 5 years later, the creation of this sources stood at the same quantity for ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 131, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'gases'' or 'gas's'?
Suggestion: gases'; gas's
... unchangedin 1985. However, the natural gases energy was used more and more, the figu...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, still, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 915.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 199.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59798994975 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51935764639 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562814070352 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 265.5 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.4926829268 173% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 145.517833959 43.030603864 338% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 183.0 112.824112599 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.8 22.9334400587 174% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.23603664747 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166560658911 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10772188607 0.103423049105 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108462499296 0.0843802449381 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128931135374 0.15604864568 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108912607073 0.0819641961636 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.2329268293 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 61.2550243902 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.9970731707 160% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 109, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Whereas'?
Suggestion: Whereas
...ew significantly over the period shown. Where as, the production of petroleum saw a high...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 151, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...ere as, the production of petroleum saw a highest quantity in each year shown. I...
^
Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ion kWh. 5 years later, the creation of this sources stood at the same quantity for ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 131, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'gases'' or 'gas's'?
Suggestion: gases'; gas's
... unchangedin 1985. However, the natural gases energy was used more and more, the figu...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, still, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 915.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 199.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59798994975 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51935764639 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562814070352 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 265.5 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.4926829268 173% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 145.517833959 43.030603864 338% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 183.0 112.824112599 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.8 22.9334400587 174% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.23603664747 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166560658911 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10772188607 0.103423049105 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108462499296 0.0843802449381 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128931135374 0.15604864568 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108912607073 0.0819641961636 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.2329268293 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 61.2550243902 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.9970731707 160% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.