Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records. Which approach do you prefer, and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Many people have different believes about the role social-networking platforms play in our lives. In my opinion, I think that uploading your data to social media should be discouraged. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, records kept in the social-networking sites can be use against you in the future. Most especially, people that want your downfall will do everything possible to bring you down. When they see something that is very useful to them to achieve their plans they will use it. Drawing from my own personal experience. Several years ago in Nigeria, a man named John Foster contested for the presidential position in Nigeria. Mr. John is a very famous celebrity known all over Nigeria. He usually likes to post pictures of himself drinking, smoking, and partying in hotels and other social gatherings. After so many years of doing this, he stopped smoking and drinking in order to live a healthy lifestyle. During his presidential campaign, many people talked about him and vowed that they would not vote for any other candidate except him. His political opponents tried many times to bring him down but their efforts prove futile. One day, one of them went to Mr. John's social media account, and copied all those pictures he took several years ago when he was still smoking and drinking, and circulated it online. When people saw it, they lost hope in Mr. John. Nobody wanted to associate with him because they thought he is still living those lifestyles. Because of this Mr. John lost the election. This example clearly shows why it not good to upload your pictures or records on social media.
Secondly, records posted online can be used to swindle people. More importantly, fraudulent people can use it for their selfish gains. I had to admit that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by personal experience. In the year 2002 in Nigeria, before Late Mrs Jane Peters died, she was known as an advocate of charity. She usually use her social media platforms to talk about charity and even seek funds which she will distribute to the less privileged. Pictures were uploaded which contain the account number which people can transfer money to. Later, someone collected some pictures from Mrs Jane's social media account and changed the account number to his. He used this method to deceive people into transferring money to him until he was caught. When the news got to people, they were very sad that they have been deceived by a fraudster. Since then, people don't like to donate online again.
In conclusion, I feel that people should not upload their data online. this is because it can be use to work against you in the future. Also, your records can be use for fraudulent activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'beliefs' (noun) instead of believes (verb)?
Suggestion: beliefs
Many people have different believes about the role social-networking platfo...
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... everything possible to bring you down. When they see something that is very useful ...
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Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
...position in Nigeria. Mr. John is a very famous celebrity known all over Nigeria. He usually like...
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...ht he is still living those lifestyles. Because of this Mr. John lost the election. Thi...
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Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
... as an advocate of charity. She usually use her social media platforms to talk abou...
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Suggestion: don't
...ived by a fraudster. Since then, people dont like to donate online again. In conc...
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...le should not upload their data online. this is because it can be use to work agains...
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
... data online. this is because it can be use to work against you in the future. Also...
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
... data online. this is because it can be use to work against you in the future. Also...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86526315789 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53640441736 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536842105263 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.2198242115 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.5483870968 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3225806452 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.74193548387 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244922784939 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640406535622 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543181191079 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151247700157 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311255873014 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.37 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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