Some parent offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

There has been a constant drumbeat about whether parents should reward children with money. Some people hold the point that against such opinion, others support. From my perspective, I consider it to be a beneficial way and I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.

Admittedly, some people might be concerned that children will misunderstand the meaning of learning, and misguide offspring with an inappropriate attitude approaching knowledge. However, rewarding the youth with fortune is actually encouraging them to study harder and giving them the motivation to figure out questions. Therefore the concern is not necessary and pointless.

Moreover, offering money gives an opportunity to educate children's financial awareness. With the money that can manage and decide how to spend, children will begin to organize a reasonable and responsible way to deal with the money, whether is investing or entertaining. For instance, a friend of mine grew up with such a financial education method, and he became interested and well-developed in managing financial issues and problems. Eventually, be graduated with a bachelor's degree and associate with an investment major. Rewarding children with money is an effective way to influence and develop them, even if the consequences are not directly visible.

In addition, the carrot and stick approach is based on the natural law that roles our world. Neglecting some exceptions, you always take rewards for achieving something good and be punished by doing a bad one. By using this method, offspring will learn these natural rules and adapt themselves. These rules can be generalized to every aspect of life. You do exercise and are reward by getting a good shape and a healthy state. Even from a broader point of view. Humankind polluted the environment and get punished by disease and extreme climate.

From what has been discussed above, we can safely draw a conclusion that giving money to children as a reward comes with a positive impact. Because they can learn about different experiences.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3549382716 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93444837632 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604938271605 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8252017329 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.75 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148312148242 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445356112814 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436044778065 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0775329882106 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351839499163 0.0645574589148 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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