The following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice to a client.
"Homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last year that region experienced 90 days with below-average temperatures, and (4) climate forecasters at Waymarsh University predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes have been built in this region during the past year. Because these developments will certainly result in an increased demand for heating oil, we recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil."
In the letter from a firm with a recommendation of investment, the advisor suggests investing in Consolidated Industries, expecting the increment in usage of heating oil. The author solely believes that unusually cold weather will be prolonged in the future, and the population in the region will increase as well. However, prior to taking into consideration investing in Consolidated Industries, three questions must be answered.
First of all, how much more heating oil is used for the period of 90 days with atypically low temperature compared to the previous years in the northeastern United States? Is it possible that heating oil usage was not increased as much as the advisor assumed? In the letter, it states that heating oil is the major resource in winter but fails to mention other recourses. Also, the advisor fails to provide the actual relationship between cold weather and heating oil consumption and how much heating oil was used in last year compared to the previous years which is very critical information. Without this information provided, it is hard to believe that the recommendation holds true.
Secondly, is heating oil the only recourse to go through winter for the residents in the northeastern area? Is it possible to have any other heating oil suppliers available in the region? The letter fails to inform the public whether Consolidated Industries monopolizes the heating oil market or shares the market with other companies. If Consolidated Industries share the market, how much does Consolidated Industries secure the market share? The unwarranted assumption could weaken the suggestion.
Third, Is Waymarsh University a reliable and reputable source? The advisor quotes that unusually cold weather patterns will continue for several more years, thus increased in heating oil usage. However, the advisor is reluctant to inform the people how trustworthy Waymarsh university’s data is, and it is almost impossible to trust the university without knowing how well equipped to perform, such as meteorological data, computational equipment, predictions models, and so forth.
In summary, the argument is not compelling to invest in Consolidated Industries and lacks of data to validate the assertion regarding the increasing demand for heating oil in many aspects. If the advisor is able to answer those three questions and offer more evidence, then it will be possible to evaluate the validation of the suggestion.
- The following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice to a client Homes in the northeastern United States where winters are typically cold have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating Last year that region experienced 9 63
- Teachers should make it their duty to consider the suggestions of their students when making their curriculum Write an essay in which you explain the degree to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation in the process of developing your opinion y 66
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 384 350
No. of Characters: 2017 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.427 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.253 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.954 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.919 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.562 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 386, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...idated Industries share the market, how much does Consolidated Industries secure the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thus, well, in summary, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2076.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40625 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02782506254 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497395833333 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.989277744 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.333333333 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248576896811 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808473918936 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747762479894 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126471167782 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07563713026 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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