The picture illustrates how a medical centre changed after some developments in 2010 compared to 2008

The picture illustrates how a therapeutic center changed after a number of developments in 2010 comparing to 2008.

As can be seen from the map, the pharmaceutical center experienced a dramatic transformation with the addition of an education room, a mother and child area, a pharmacy and a store room.

In 2008, there existed a tiny medical center with a limited number of rooms. The main entrance leading to waiting place which remained unchanged in size and position. Likewise, the staff service, the reception and the laboratory experienced no changes over the period. The corridor was the way to three doctor’s stations located to the east of the treatment room and the staff office in the middle of the center.

In 2010, the pharmaceutical center was expanded with the installation of an education room and a mother and child room in the area to the south of the treatment room. A new pharmacy was constructed in the southeast corner of the medical facility in close proximity to the laboratory. Doctor’s places are downsized to make room for one more and a new store room was also created in the northeast corner of the center.

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Average: 7.3 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... from the map, the pharmaceutical center experienced a dramatic transformation wi...
^^
Line 5, column 45, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...008, there existed a tiny medical center with a limited number of rooms. The main...
^^
Line 5, column 137, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: unchanged
...leading to waiting place which remained unchanged in size and position. Likewise, the staff servi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 250, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'proximity'.
Suggestion: proximity
...heast corner of the medical facility in close proximity to the laboratory. Doctor’s places are ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 340, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... are downsized to make room for one more and a new store room was also created in...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, likewise, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 954.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 194.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9175257732 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92162111024 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520618556701 0.547539520022 95% => OK
syllable_count: 296.1 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.33902439024 230% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9938266 43.030603864 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5555555556 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.23603664747 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167292418335 0.215688989381 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929631408844 0.103423049105 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.183445387632 0.0843802449381 217% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176844220028 0.15604864568 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.247247403486 0.0819641961636 302% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... from the map, the pharmaceutical center experienced a dramatic transformation wi...
^^
Line 5, column 45, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...008, there existed a tiny medical center with a limited number of rooms. The main...
^^
Line 5, column 137, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: unchanged
...leading to waiting place which remained unchanged in size and position. Likewise, the staff servi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 250, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'proximity'.
Suggestion: proximity
...heast corner of the medical facility in close proximity to the laboratory. Doctor’s places are ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 340, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... are downsized to make room for one more and a new store room was also created in...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, likewise, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 954.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 194.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9175257732 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92162111024 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520618556701 0.547539520022 95% => OK
syllable_count: 296.1 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.33902439024 230% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9938266 43.030603864 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5555555556 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.23603664747 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167292418335 0.215688989381 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929631408844 0.103423049105 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.183445387632 0.0843802449381 217% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176844220028 0.15604864568 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.247247403486 0.0819641961636 302% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.