Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The extended family grandparents cousins aunts and uncles is less important now than it was in the past Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Privacy is very important for current generation and they think that an extended family can not offer them this privacy. For this very reason they support the argument that in today’s world an extended family is less important. However, I do not agree with this and strongly believe that having an extended family is more important in current times. I will support my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First of all, an extended family is very important because it lower various expenses and help saving a lot of money. For example, if a new couple plan to move out of the family, they have to buy or at least rent a new house, while their family is already living in one. Staying with family member saves a lot of money in the form of house rent and this money can be saved for future or can be invested. In the time of economic unpredictability and pandemic, it is more important than ever to have economic stability. For this reason, I think that having an extended family is more important.
Secondly, extended family, especially grandparents play a crucial role in anchoring a family. In the times of hectic schedules, odd jobs, and long office hours, having a family beside you has become more important. My own family is best example of this. My uncle and aunt were about to have a divorce because of their long office jobs and they were so tired at the end of day the they that had not enough time for each other. My grandparents made thing easy for them and did house chores so they don’t have to work again after their office time. This small effort did puts a lot of ease in their life and they are still together after many years. Because of an extended family, person or couple do not suffer alone and there are other family members to support them during their hard time. So, in my opinion extended family is more important now.
In conclusion, it is an complex issue to decide the importance of extended family in current times. Many people thinks that there should be some days for couples to just live alone. Nonetheless, I still contends that having an extended family is more important now.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 64, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lowers', 'lows'?
Suggestion: lowers; lows
...ded family is very important because it lower various expenses and help saving a lot ...
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Line 2, column 96, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to save' or 'save'.
Suggestion: to save; save
...ause it lower various expenses and help saving a lot of money. For example, if a new c...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
...as become more important. My own family is best example of this. My uncle and aunt were...
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Line 3, column 378, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'they'?
Suggestion: the; they
...nd they were so tired at the end of day the they that had not enough time for each other...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 428, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hat had not enough time for each other. My grandparents made thing easy for them a...
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Line 3, column 570, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'put'
Suggestion: put
...heir office time. This small effort did puts a lot of ease in their life and they ar...
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Line 4, column 23, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... important now. In conclusion, it is an complex issue to decide the importance ...
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Line 4, column 205, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'contend'
Suggestion: contend
...o just live alone. Nonetheless, I still contends that having an extended family is more ...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, while, at least, for example, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60158311346 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38865713693 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477572559367 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.813259515 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.95 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211580377037 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827807847364 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540955923179 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145339068316 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449541745415 0.0645574589148 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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