Society today is marked by increased incidences of crimininal activities, pervading through people of all age. While juveniles are behaviorally more inclined towards extremism, brainwashed to believe preachings which are otherwise detrimental to humanity, there are several adults who willingly admit to crimes of vicious nature. The prompt questions whether a person who willingly commits a crime should still be entitled to his civil rights or the rights to benefit from own labor. In my opinion, the claim is cursory in that it does not take into account the circumstances or the personality traits that often compel an individual to take an antisocial path. Furthermore, every individual should be entitled to correct his wrong, and eradicating an individual's social rights shuts off directly the path to do so.
An increase in massive shootings at schools, throughout the globe shows how often the prevalent societal conditions around an individual shape his personality. A child who is racially or physically abused at school, often finds his bullies intolerable and as such when proper gun control measures are not in place, takes up arms against his peers. Parental control often serves to mitigate such behavioral traits developing early on during childhood. However, even with such measures in place, the other inherent characteristics of the child, such as an introvert nature or too much exposure to violent television programs, play a paramount role in creating a behavioral change. However, if such an individual, having broken the societal laws, is stripped off his civil and social rights, then it is tantamount to closing all avenues whereby the individual can correct his wrongdoing and start off afresh in a path of righteousness.
Other criminal activities such as theft or larceny often stems from societal adversities that individuals face. A person deep into poverty may see no other method to survive than to steal money or other belongings. While such crimes do not significantly cause loss of lives, it can cause security issues in a society where people fail to trust each other. Repeated accounts of thefts in a particular community leads to discontent with the authorities and other social issues. As much as crime in itself, people suffering from poverty and indigence arising out global scenarios such as recession, often resort to such practices to sustain their daily life. However, often such people are the first ones to let go of such activities once their situation becomes better and hence, based on the claim, if such individuals no longer retain their civil rights to benefit from their earnest labor then any chance of allowing them to find jobs, that would otherwise prevent such crimes, is effectively eradicated.
Indisputably, certain crimes are well planned by individuals in a meticulous and shrewd way. Such individuals are characterised by traits that often arise due to psychological changes in their way of thinking. Accounts of planned murder, serial killing, drug trafficking, human trafficking or vengeful activities such gang wars often serve to show how people can be vicious at times. Such individuals should be punished as per the societal laws prevalent globally to a maximum degree. However, once these punishments are served, which often involve long prison sentences, such people should be encouraged to take on an earnest approach to livelihood.
In conclusion, the claim does not differentiate between petty thefts or serious crimes such as murder. It considers a singular approach tomards taking away the civil rights of criminals.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 750, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
...d to correct his wrong, and eradicating an individuals social rights shuts off directly the pa...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 814, Rule ID: IT_IS_JJ_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'close'?
Suggestion: close
...social rights, then it is tantamount to closing all avenues whereby the individual can ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'lead'?
Suggestion: lead
...nts of thefts in a particular community leads to discontent with the authorities and ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 617, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'practices sustaining'.
Suggestion: practices sustaining
...such as recession, often resort to such practices to sustain their daily life. However, often such p...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, still, then, well, while, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3033.0 2235.4752809 136% => OK
No of words: 570.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32105263158 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88617158649 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87594164059 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 310.0 215.323595506 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543859649123 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 947.7 704.065955056 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3372406361 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.869565217 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7826086957 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86956521739 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172272335207 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534736495484 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721880218888 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107539584877 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681331844019 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 164.0 100.480337079 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 750, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
...d to correct his wrong, and eradicating an individuals social rights shuts off directly the pa...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 814, Rule ID: IT_IS_JJ_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'close'?
Suggestion: close
...social rights, then it is tantamount to closing all avenues whereby the individual can ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'lead'?
Suggestion: lead
...nts of thefts in a particular community leads to discontent with the authorities and ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 617, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'practices sustaining'.
Suggestion: practices sustaining
...such as recession, often resort to such practices to sustain their daily life. However, often such p...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, still, then, well, while, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3033.0 2235.4752809 136% => OK
No of words: 570.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32105263158 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88617158649 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87594164059 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 310.0 215.323595506 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543859649123 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 947.7 704.065955056 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3372406361 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.869565217 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7826086957 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86956521739 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172272335207 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534736495484 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721880218888 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107539584877 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681331844019 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 164.0 100.480337079 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.