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Which of the following ways can help children behave better
- limiting types of television programs and movies
- spend more time talking with children
- supervising and monitoring

In the modern days, how to take care of children is a critical issue. As for me, I think supervising and monitoring children is the best to deal with this task.

First of all, children are always curious so they always try new things although the behavior may be harmful. If parents can tell children that it is wrong and prohibit them from doing it, children may not commit the fault. Take my sister as an example; when she was 3 years old, she liked to watch cooking shows. She was attracted by the cooks to use knives to make tofu thin slices. One day, she picked a knife in the kitchen, stood on the stools since she wasn’t tall enough, and started cutting the tofu. The knife was so heavy that she could not hold it stably in hand and eventually fell to the ground. Mom saw it and head to warn my sister not to use this dangerous equipment. Also, she cut the tofu for my sister in person. However, if my mom doesn’t discover right away that my sister is using it and tell her how dangerous it is, she might keep using the knife and finally cut her fingers. As a result, supervising is an indispensable way to hinder children from misbehaving.

Secondly, children are afraid of being scolded by adults. If adults keep monitoring the children, they will not do something controversial since they don’t want to be punished. For instance, as a kindergarten teacher, I needed to take care of 5 children in a class. I always watched what each of them was doing and would let them leave my vision. Also, when they wanted to go to the restroom, I would stay outside in case something urgent happened. In his way, they all knew I was very clear about each of their behavior and it was very hard for them to misconduct. If it happens, I will scold and punish them. However, if I am not a responsible teacher and all the children know my reputation, they might secretly behave badly because they think I will not discover who does this. In the end, the learning environment will be chaos. As a consequence, I believe that monitoring is the best way to reduce the chances of children’s tricks.

In conclusion, I posit that supervising and monitoring is the most method to avoid children’s misbehavior. This is because parents can warn their children about this and make sure they won’t do it again. Also, children will not risk misbehaving since they don’t want to be scolded and punished.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, as for, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1976.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55299539171 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57083388396 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486175115207 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2323934401 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.04 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.36 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.32 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171549926365 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586428122744 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640671784594 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136892277734 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441484981592 0.0645574589148 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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