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Which of the following ways can help children behave better
- limiting types of television programs and movies
- spend more time talking with children
- supervising and monitoring

In modern days, how to take care of children is a critical issue. As for me, I think supervising and monitoring children is the best way to deal with this task.

First of all, children are always curious so they try new things although the behavior may be harmful. If parents can tell children that it is wrong and prohibit them from doing it, children may not commit the fault. Take my sister as an example; when she was 3 years old, she liked to watch cooking shows. Furthermore, she was attracted by the cook’s movement to use a knife to make thin slices One day, she picked up a knife in the kitchen, stood on the stool since she wasn’t tall enough, and started cutting the tofu. The knife was so heavy that she could not hold it stable with bare hands and it eventually fell to the ground. Mom who was wiping the stoves in the kitchen saw it and headed to warn my sister not to use this dangerous equipment. Also, she demonstrated cutting the tofu for my sister in person. However, if my mom limits the types of television programs and movies that my sister can watch, she may hate mom and intentionally make trouble to irritate mom. As a result, supervising is an indispensable way to hinder children from misbehaving.

Secondly, children are afraid of being scolded by adults. If adults keep monitoring the children, they will not do something controversial since they don’t want to be punished. For instance, as a kindergarten teacher, I needed to take care of 5 children in a class. I always watched what each of them was doing and would not let them go beyond my visual field. Also, when they wanted to go to the restroom, I would stay outside in case something urgent happened. In his way, they all knew I was very clear about each of their behaviors and it was very hard for them to misconduct. However, if I spend more time talking with those kids, they might consider me to be a long-winded and inflexible person. In the end, they may be perfunctory to me. As a consequence, I believe that monitoring is the best way to reduce the chances of children's tricks.

In conclusion, I posit that supervising and monitoring is the best method to avoid children's misbehavior. This is because supervisors can warn children not to do wrongdoings and make sure they won’t do it again. Also, children will not risk misbehaving since they don’t want to be scolded and punished.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 573, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'stables'?
Suggestion: stables
...was so heavy that she could not hold it stable with bare hands and it eventually fell ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, as for, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1968.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58741258741 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65925584423 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505827505828 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.544784773 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5652173913 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.652173913 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95652173913 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247138453846 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075979810957 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06803602897 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167089520868 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317624854041 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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