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Which of the following ways can help children behave better
- limiting types of television programs and movies
- spend more time talking with children
- supervising and monitoring

In modern days, how to take care of children is a critical issue. As for me, I think supervising and monitoring children is the best way to deal with this task.

First of all, children are always curious so they try new things although the behavior may be harmful. If parents can tell children that it is wrong and prohibit them from doing it, children may not commit the fault. Take my sister as an example; when she was 3 years old, she liked to watch cooking shows. Furthermore, she was attracted by the cook's movement to use a knife to make thin slices One day, she picked up a knife in the kitchen, stood on the stool since she wasn't tall enough, and started cutting the tofu. The knife was so heavy that she could not hold it stable with bare hands and it eventually fell to the ground. Mom who was wiping the stoves in the kitchen saw it and headed to warn my sister not to use this dangerous equipment. Also, she demonstrated cutting the tofu for my sister in person. However, if my mom doesn't discover right away that my sister is using it and tell her how dangerous it is, she might keep using the knife and finally cut her fingers. As a result, supervising is an indispensable way to hinder children from misbehaving.

Secondly, children are afraid of being scolded by adults. If adults keep monitoring the children, they will not do something controversial since they don't want to be punished. For instance, as a kindergarten teacher, I needed to take care of 5 children in a class. I always watched what each of them was doing and would not let them go beyond my visual field. Also, when they wanted to go to the restroom, I would stay outside in case something urgent happened. In his way, they all knew I was very clear about each of their behaviors and it was very hard for them to misconduct. However, if I am not a responsible teacher and all the children know my reputation for laziness, they might secretly behave badly because they think I will not discover who does this. In the end, the learning environment will be chaotic. As a consequence, I believe that monitoring is the best way to reduce the chances of children's tricks.

In conclusion, I posit that supervising and monitoring is the best method to avoid children's misbehavior. This is because supervisors can warn children not to do wrongdoings and make sure they won't do it again. Also, children will not risk misbehaving since they don't want to be scolded and punished.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 346, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cooks'' or 'cook's'?
Suggestion: cooks'; cook's
.... Furthermore, she was attracted by the cooks movement to use a knife to make thin sl...
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Line 3, column 472, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...e kitchen, stood on the stool since she wasnt tall enough, and started cutting the to...
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Line 3, column 571, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'stables'?
Suggestion: stables
...was so heavy that she could not hold it stable with bare hands and it eventually fell ...
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Line 3, column 834, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...my sister in person. However, if my mom doesnt discover right away that my sister is u...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...t do something controversial since they dont want to be punished. For instance, as a...
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Line 7, column 264, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...en will not risk misbehaving since they dont want to be scolded and punished.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, as for, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54504504505 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59974698 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490990990991 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0286253138 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7391304348 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3043478261 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.34782608696 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178354514515 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066740341118 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666352411135 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146204880307 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051215324543 0.0645574589148 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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