In today's intricate and interconnected world, children education plays a vital role in the development and success of countries and societies. Some people believe that it has become so much easier to train kids nowadays when we compare it to the past. I, personally, on the other hand, think that today it is a hard issue to educate youngsters and kids for two significant reasons which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, nowadays it is a difficult task to teach youngsters than the past because innovation and technological progress has led students to become easily disturbed and to quickly lose their attention than older times. Although tech devices has had some major benefits, but their negative impacts can be easily seen in today's education performances of young students. My cousin example is a good illustration of this concept. She used to work a lot with her cellphone and played a lot of games leading her to fail some of her courses when she was studied in elementary school. However, when I compare it to my grandfather's times, they had less disturbances than what we have in today's circumstances making it hard for teachers and also parents to teach children. Had she not disturbed so much by a lot of distractions surrounded by, she could have passed her exams and learned a lot along the way. This case shows how this factor has influenced the education of young individuals and adolescents in the world.
Last but not least, in today's milieu, children have access to a variety of rich resources which they can learn from. As a result, it makes the learning process difficult for educators nowadays than before. For instance, my brother's kids can easily go to online websites and or social network applications to search for an issue or problem they are faced with and get answers as fast and quick as possible. They just need to get online and search for what they want to know. Consequently, they can get information which is just one click away. Thus, they can absorb what they are looking for in a convenient fashion, in a less time and in an efficient way. Hence, accessing to a lot of easier sources to get a wealth of knowledge from, has caused serious difficulties for trainers to educate their youngsters.
To put it all in a nutshell, taking all the aforementioned examples and reasons into account, I am of opinion that it is not an easy job to educate children nowadays compared to the past. Not only does new technologies make it hard for young students to concentrate on education curriculum provided by their teachers and parents, but also children are just one click away from getting what they want, and when they want.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 651, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun disturbances is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e it to my grandfathers times, they had less disturbances than what we have in today...
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Line 5, column 592, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a convenient fashion" with adverb for "convenient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ey can absorb what they are looking for in a convenient fashion, in a less time and in an efficient way...
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Line 5, column 636, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient way" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... convenient fashion, in a less time and in an efficient way. Hence, accessing to a lot of easier so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, so, thus, for instance, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81034482759 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77052590015 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515086206897 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8985194262 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.473684211 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4210526316 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22690452388 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668904138341 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0277242318051 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132935383978 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0117425290507 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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