The given line graph illustrates clients average every year spending on mobile phone national and international land line and services

The given line graph illustrates clients' average spending on mobile phone, national and international land line services every year from 2001 to 2010

From basic observation, the number of mobile phone services and international fixed-line services improved remarkably. By contrast, the number of national fixed-line services witnessed a downward trend over the period shown.

The line graph gives information about how much people in america spending on mobile phone, domestic and worldwide fixed-line services over the period 9 years from 2001 to 2010.
Overall, it is clear that while the number of money spent on cell phone services increased significantly, the opposite was true for national fixed-line services, which went down sharply. It’s also noticable that the citizens in america use international fixed-line services was the lowest figures during most of the period.
Looking at the chart, there was an everage of about $700 used for national landline phone, which was the highest data in 2001. however, the figures for cell phone services and worldwide landline services were only $200 and nearly $300 respectively at the same time. Over the next 5 years, the number of spending on national fixed-line services decreased considerably by around $200. in the other hand, the evergae annual expenditure on cell phone services progressed remarkably approximately $300, at $500. in addition, the data of national landline services improved minimally, about $300 in 2006.
In detail, in 2006, the consumers spending on cell phone and national landline services in America were similarly, about $500 on each. There was a went up enormously to nearly $800 in the number of spending on cell phone services from 2006 to 2010. In contrast, the figure for national fixed-line services declined moderately around $100, at $400 in the same time. Finally, the numer of spending on overseas landline services remained statically by the end of the period.

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Average: 6.1 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 44, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... line graph gives information about how much people in america spending on mobile ph...
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Line 7, column 125, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...ne, which was the highest data in 2001. however, the figures for cell phone services an...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 375, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...es decreased considerably by around 00. in the other hand, the evergae annual expe...
^^
Line 7, column 495, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...sed remarkably approximately 00, at 00. in addition, the data of national landline...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, look, similarly, so, while, in addition, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 33.7804878049 175% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 965.302439024 170% => OK
No of words: 307.0 196.424390244 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.332247557 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80756817744 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 106.607317073 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446254071661 0.547539520022 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 515.7 283.868780488 182% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.33902439024 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 3.36585365854 357% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2413595314 43.030603864 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.928571429 112.824112599 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 22.9334400587 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.23603664747 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.442745303568 0.215688989381 205% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174536994004 0.103423049105 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168870134223 0.0843802449381 200% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.334931393593 0.15604864568 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.244168054016 0.0819641961636 298% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 61.2550243902 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.3012195122 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 11.4140731707 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 40.7170731707 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 44, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... line graph gives information about how much people in america spending on mobile ph...
^^^^
Line 7, column 125, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...ne, which was the highest data in 2001. however, the figures for cell phone services an...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 375, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...es decreased considerably by around 00. in the other hand, the evergae annual expe...
^^
Line 7, column 495, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...sed remarkably approximately 00, at 00. in addition, the data of national landline...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, look, similarly, so, while, in addition, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 33.7804878049 175% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 965.302439024 170% => OK
No of words: 307.0 196.424390244 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.332247557 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80756817744 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 106.607317073 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446254071661 0.547539520022 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 515.7 283.868780488 182% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.33902439024 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 3.36585365854 357% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2413595314 43.030603864 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.928571429 112.824112599 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 22.9334400587 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.23603664747 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.442745303568 0.215688989381 205% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174536994004 0.103423049105 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168870134223 0.0843802449381 200% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.334931393593 0.15604864568 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.244168054016 0.0819641961636 298% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 61.2550243902 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.3012195122 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 11.4140731707 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 40.7170731707 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.