Some people believe that children are given too much free time They feel that this time should be used to do more school work How do you think children should spend their free time

These days , it is believed that children should spend more time on studying . Although this idea is reasonable to some extent , i would argue that student should be given too much free time .

On the one hand , i am convinced that students need to have free time . Firstly , the study at school is extremely difficult so student are suffered nervousness and pressure which make them quite tired . Accordingly , they need to have relaxations which improve their emotion and advance their confidence after learning at school .Secondly , children should be learned things without knowledge at school which have an important function to the development of children . For example , Swimming or skills which would bring assistances for student in the future .

On the other hand , It is understandable why children have to spend more time on school . On top of that , the majority of student are quite lazy so they need an encouragement from teacher to learn more efficiency .When students don not have their teachers beside , they often play games or watch movie instead of learning . Therefore, they must stay at school longer to get more achievements . Furthermore , Children often have a good behaviour if they stay at school because the appearance of rules in school make them behave carefully . In addition to , Parents could focus on working when their children stay at school because they don not worry about the study and safeness of their children

In conclusion , There may be some reasons to support children need to spend more time on school . I strongly believe that this policy is not without drawsbacks and thus should not be implemented by the state.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1378.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06617647059 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67782468982 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533088235294 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.3228665198 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.833333333 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.6666666667 7.06120827912 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 36.0 5.01903807615 717% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379493894561 0.244688304435 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160113236934 0.084324248473 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117287340705 0.0667982634062 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291519878045 0.151304729494 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125184581372 0.056905535591 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.