Many companies sponsor sports as a way of advertising themselves. Some people think that it is a good thing, while others think it has disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sports commercialization is viral topic so that many corporations are willing to promote their business with sports. Some people argue that making sports as advertisement tool could possibly emerge disadvantages, while other believe that it can benefit for the sports itself and the athlete. This essay will discuss the debate and provide a conclusion.
On the one hand, those who reject this statement consider that companies just think the profit which they could gain as much as possible without thinking the sportsmanship. It can be seen that there are many sports match which are fixed in order to fulfill fans satisfaction. This leads to decreasing of sport values since viewers concern about entertainment only. In addition, it is conspicuous that some sports’ branch has controversies due to scandals and using illegal substance. For example, in football and basketball, the sponsors force their athlete to consume illegal drugs in order that they can enhance their stamina, causing lack of morality for viewers especially the youngster.
On the other hand, some branch of sports gains a popularity caused by companies which advertise them, especially companies which focus on sport equipment such as Nike, Puma and Adidas. By this, it means that viewer do more sport activities because of advertisement of sports. Furthermore, it seems that not only do sport reach popularity but also the athlete obtain lot of income, inasmuch as companies provide allowance for them. Proponents of this view believe that it can increase athlete’s life quality and also their families since they obtain money from sponsors.
To conclude, I assume that commercialization of sport could provide lot of benefits for the sport and the athlete since the companies can make viewer be interested to do sport and provide income for the athlete. This is as long as the companies are able to manage their viewer and never force their athlete.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...hat making sports as advertisement tool could possibly emerge disadvantages, while other belie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24193548387 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83214232992 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538709677419 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.084715692 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.071428571 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202197401854 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071718437964 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484233567251 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131249176175 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362319956641 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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