In the future, there will be a higher proportion of older people than young people in many countries. Is it a positive or negative effects.
It’s a negative development. In my opinion, a higher ratio of elder people than youngsters could cause global development to be collapsed. If a country or city is facing older population overwhelming young people. It could cause serious economic problems. I am going to explain the drawbacks in the essay.
Firstly, the higher ratio of elder communities in a city could result in a lack of income but a substantial amount of expenditure. For example, as a city have a large population of older people and a small young community, most young people prefer to travel to another city for their future. At that time, the government needs to support the older people with pensions and supply medical institutions for healthcare and physical examination. Therefore, the government could expense a large amount of budget without any impossible income.
Secondly, the population of young individuals are mostly represented the workforce of the city. The workforce could have a significant decrease as the young generation are move to other cities. In doing so, most elderly individuals are unable to work or be an employee. This could affect industrial commerce to be closed or have no benefit. Thus, the economy of the city could be ceased as there is no possible income for the city and it also needs to use the budget to support the older people.
In conclusion, with the development of a higher proportion of elder communities than younger people, the whole society could be affected negatively as cities or countries have to expend an enormous amount of budget to assist the elder community with less income.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...verwhelming young people. It could cause serious economic problems. I am going to...
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...tial amount of expenditure. For example, as a city have a large population of old...
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...small young community, most young people prefer to travel to another city for the...
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...fit. Thus, the economy of the city could be ceased as there is no possible income...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1350.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05617977528 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86981337538 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50936329588 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 438.3 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.172798505 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238195458103 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763731415573 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065028754364 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156644297265 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506103870584 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...verwhelming young people. It could cause serious economic problems. I am going to...
^^
Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tial amount of expenditure. For example, as a city have a large population of old...
^^
Line 3, column 242, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...small young community, most young people prefer to travel to another city for the...
^^
Line 5, column 377, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fit. Thus, the economy of the city could be ceased as there is no possible income...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1350.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05617977528 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86981337538 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50936329588 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 438.3 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.172798505 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238195458103 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763731415573 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065028754364 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156644297265 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506103870584 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.