Some people think that government should ban dangerous sports while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activities Discuss both views and give your opinions

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Some people think that government should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activities. Discuss both views and give your opinions

It is clear that extreme sports are dangerous, so some people think the government should prohibit it. While Others argue that people have the right to do any kind of sports that they want. In my opinion, I believe people should have freedom to participate in any activities.
There are some reasons why government should ban dangerous sports. First, since Extreme sports will leave a long lasting injuries on people physical health. Bones broken, for example, it will make people hard to move or do heavy jobs in the future, so the quality of life will reduce day by day. Moreover, Dangerous sports can cause mental illness. The most dangerous example is plant-life. People will be paralysed since their brain is damaged by collapsing while playing. This disease is likely to cause permanent affected, and the percentage of recovery is very low. Thus, government should consider about banning this kind of sport.
Although extreme sports some time can be fatal, I still believe that players always are protected by producers and take many beneficial from extreme sports. First, nowadays, Companies who provide dangerous sports are more and more strictly about the procedures and protect equipments. For instance, jumping from a plane, players must have one professional coach to jump with them, and reject the person who under 18 to play. In addition, extreme sports can help players release stress effectively, so they can improve the productivity and creativity in the workplace.
In conclusion, I believe with the development of equipment and severe disciplines nowadays, people are free to play dangerous sports without worrying about its' negative sides.

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Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hink the government should prohibit it. While Others argue that people have the right...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 122, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'injury'?
Suggestion: injury
...xtreme sports will leave a long lasting injuries on people physical health. Bones broken...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, still, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22846441948 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60485747055 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591760299625 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0015933054 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.25 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6875 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393703675772 0.244688304435 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132036870785 0.084324248473 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106661568786 0.0667982634062 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247683614263 0.151304729494 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.17807212478 0.056905535591 313% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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