Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to poorer countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, a great number of affluent nations create financial-aid packages to support countries enduring from poverty ; however, this method seems to be ineffective. Although I opine that money help could be considered to be one of the most feasible ways, I am persuaded to think that other types of help might be more effective for poorer nations.
On the one hand, there are a chain of arguments encouraging me to believe that rich countries ought to help impoverished ones financially. The first justification is that if prosperous nations allocate money to help poorer ones, these countries can use money supported to provide their inhabitants with food, water. For example, thanks to the money aid from other rich countries, innumerable residents living in some impoverished nations in Africa like Nigeria, Sudan,… do not suffer from famines. Without money support, a lot of lives could not be saved. Furthermore, owning to the financial allocation from many affluent countries, plenty of poor ones can make investments to boost their own economies. As a result, these nations can see the prospects and opportunities to be capable of escaping from the poverty and developing to gain prosperity.
On the other hand, from my perspective, other types of assistance can be attributed to be the motivation for poor nations to progress. The most fundamental help might be the supplies of food and fresh water. As these things can be considered to be the most paramount factors for the survival of humans, a great number of citizens do not no longer endure from hungers. To illustrate, if it had not been for the food support from other wealthy countries like the USA or the UK, a lot of Africans could have lost their lives due to starvation. Moreover, it might be efficient for rich nations to exchange modern technical technology with poorer ones to help their economies and other fields. Thanks to the advanced technology, impoverished nations can apply it to fundamental economic sectors and gradually recover from the crisis they have to confront.
In conclusion, apparently, financial support for poorer nations from the prosperous ones might bring about a number of benefits. Besides, I would assert that it might be more auspicious for other kinds of help to be taken into account.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: chains
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.0 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 1.00243902439 1596% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 5.60731707317 410% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 33.7804878049 178% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 965.302439024 199% => OK
No of words: 376.0 196.424390244 191% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10904255319 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 3.73543355544 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87963990553 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 106.607317073 175% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497340425532 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.9 283.868780488 210% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6002106735 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0625 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1875 5.23603664747 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 3.70975609756 377% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174562350221 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679377952588 0.103423049105 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486320228223 0.0843802449381 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127666399535 0.15604864568 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474962316142 0.0819641961636 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.2329268293 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 40.7170731707 246% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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