Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
We cannot say that the media is an exact mirror of the real world. Lots of real world problems were hidden in the media. Media only cast what the audience should see. They are not the real picture of the real world.
Nowadays media have strong influence among people. So if any of the politicians or business people wants to make any attention towards any particular thing, the first choice they would think about is media. Because media has large influence among ordinary people. If they would constantly covered any issue again and again, people would definitely talk about it. Also people would think it is a large issue. So media has dangerous manipulating power also. We can see, some of the political party wisely using this power for their things. Now the world is going so dangerous as the media influencing the people very much. For example, people only believe things that covered in media. If media is supporting a particular subject and producing some people and talking good things about the subject, then people would believe it. Also if media has to cover a subject as it has adverse effect in the world. Then people would believe it like the media covered. So, the media has the strong power over people. We cannot believe it is true if any violence is covering in media. May the reason would manipulate the people for any kind of advantage. But the people are getting manipulated easily by media. Children are very easy to get manipulated. But a lot media are did not have ethics how they could present issues in media and how they would affect the people especially children.
In addition to the point above, parents have major role in influencing children. It is not less influencing than media. Children are growing up seeing their parents everyday. So children would always look for what are the things they are seeing in front of them. If the parents are strictly not showing the children the media for a certain age the has nothing to do to influence the child. So in building a children behavior parents have bigger role when comparing to the media. Also a parent is educating a child by saying not getting influenced by the things the child would see on media. Then the child should think everytime whenever any violence or any offensive things see on media. The child will definitely think whether it is reliable or not.
In conclusion, parents are more powerful in building a child's behavior. But if a parent is not well aware to teach a child properly the child may get influenced by the things seen on media.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 207, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...choice they would think about is media. Because media has large influence among ordinar...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 289, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'cover'
Suggestion: cover
...dinary people. If they would constantly covered any issue again and again, people would...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 363, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... people would definitely talk about it. Also people would think it is a large issue....
^^^^
Line 2, column 450, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... media has dangerous manipulating power also. We can see, some of the political part...
^^^^
Line 2, column 468, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...us manipulating power also. We can see, some of the political party wisely using this power...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 827, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... subject, then people would believe it. Also if media has to cover a subject as it h...
^^^^
Line 2, column 1260, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...to get manipulated. But a lot media are did not have ethics how they could present ...
^^^
Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ren are growing up seeing their parents everyday. So children would always look for what...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 479, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...igger role when comparing to the media. Also a parent is educating a child by saying...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, so, then, well, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 446.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70179372197 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35066242301 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.423766816143 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.9 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 23.0359550562 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.9901788406 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 63.5454545455 118.986275619 53% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.5151515152 23.4991977007 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.51515151515 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.83258426966 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27205682868 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846283751119 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523270545284 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148580672099 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838614564776 0.0667264976115 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 14.1392134831 53% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.1743820225 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.55 8.38706741573 78% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 100.480337079 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.2143820225 64% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 207, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...choice they would think about is media. Because media has large influence among ordinar...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 289, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'cover'
Suggestion: cover
...dinary people. If they would constantly covered any issue again and again, people would...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 363, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... people would definitely talk about it. Also people would think it is a large issue....
^^^^
Line 2, column 450, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... media has dangerous manipulating power also. We can see, some of the political part...
^^^^
Line 2, column 468, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...us manipulating power also. We can see, some of the political party wisely using this power...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 827, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... subject, then people would believe it. Also if media has to cover a subject as it h...
^^^^
Line 2, column 1260, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...to get manipulated. But a lot media are did not have ethics how they could present ...
^^^
Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ren are growing up seeing their parents everyday. So children would always look for what...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 479, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...igger role when comparing to the media. Also a parent is educating a child by saying...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, so, then, well, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 446.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70179372197 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35066242301 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.423766816143 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.9 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 23.0359550562 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.9901788406 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 63.5454545455 118.986275619 53% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.5151515152 23.4991977007 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.51515151515 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.83258426966 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27205682868 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846283751119 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523270545284 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148580672099 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838614564776 0.0667264976115 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 14.1392134831 53% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.1743820225 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.55 8.38706741573 78% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 100.480337079 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.2143820225 64% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.