The following recommendation appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.
"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to improve Hopewell's economy — and generate additional tax revenues — is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
The memorandum from the mayor of the town of hopewell suggests that to built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel to generate additional tax revenues and boost hopewell's economy however the argument relies on several assumption make argument weaker and requires further examination.
Firstly, author assumes that hopewell economy will boost similarly like ocean view economy if they built golf course and resort hotel relies on evidence ocean view revanues are risen by 30 percent but given evidence are not sufficient to make this decision because we can not be sure that revanue of ocean view is increased only because they built golf course and resort hotel. there could be other parameters or considertation carried out by government which lead to boost the economy of ocean view.
Secondly, there is no any evidence showing geolocation of ocean view and hopewell. because of ocean view is located near to crowdy area there is chances of boosting use of golf course and resort but same is not possible for hopewell so that author need to mention clear geolocation for is that both geolocated similarly.
also we are not sure about 30% means how much actual raise in revanue and this 30% is risen only because they built golf course and resort hotel as the stat is shown for last two years so that here author is assuming same but there could be other possibilities which is in turn increase in revanue.
In conclusion, the argument presented by author on various assumption and need more clear evidence which can make argument strong. also study conducted on ocean view need more clarity and information. also this need to make sure that how much percentage in 30% increased because of golf course and resort as we cant say all 30% is increased because only built of golf course and resort hotel.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 308 350
No. of Characters: 1482 1500
No. of Different Words: 135 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.189 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.812 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.416 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 98 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 51.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.388 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.558 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.885 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.346 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eral assumption make argument weaker and requires further examination. Firstl...
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Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly like ocean view economy if they built golf course and resort hotel relies on e...
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Line 3, column 290, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...decision because we can not be sure that revanue of ocean view is increased only ...
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Line 3, column 381, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...hey built golf course and resort hotel. there could be other parameters or considerta...
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Line 5, column 20, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...y of ocean view. Secondly, there is no any evidence showing geolocation of oce...
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Line 5, column 84, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...geolocation of ocean view and hopewell. because of ocean view is located near to crowdy...
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Line 5, column 137, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[3]
Message: Did you mean 'there are chances'?
Suggestion: there are chances
...ean view is located near to crowdy area there is chances of boosting use of golf course and reso...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
... is that both geolocated similarly. also we are not sure about 30% means how muc...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
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Line 9, column 132, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...vidence which can make argument strong. also study conducted on ocean view need more...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...vidence which can make argument strong. also study conducted on ocean view need more...
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Line 9, column 202, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...view need more clarity and information. also this need to make sure that how much pe...
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Line 9, column 202, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...view need more clarity and information. also this need to make sure that how much pe...
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Line 9, column 312, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...because of golf course and resort as we cant say all 30% is increased because only b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 308.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91233766234 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44882476003 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451298701299 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.895855814 57.8364921388 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.111111111 119.503703932 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.2222222222 23.324526521 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7777777778 5.70786347227 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320134715683 0.218282227539 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132947274302 0.0743258471296 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701097971737 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180055571488 0.128457276422 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473152064449 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.3799401198 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 98.500998004 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 12.3882235529 238% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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