Nowadays, with global finance experiencing an economic downturn, governments are now considering how to distribute their fundings in different fields. Some policymakers and practitioners assert that there should be more financial supports on arts rather than athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams, others think otherwise. Personally speaking, I incline to the perspective that athletics are more worth supporting. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint will be elaborated upon hereunder.
First, investment for athletics will result in the formation of patriotism which could be embedded in all the citizens’ mind.The primary reason is that preeminent athletics have profound influence among nations and always be regarded as role models. By exerting such influence with remarkable accomplishment, people will be inspired and raise deep sense of proudness for their country. Brazil, for instance, undergone a severe economic downturn during the 1950s, which made citizens feel hopeless for their country. Rebellions and riots could disintegrate the country at any time. However, it was the breakthrough made by national football team that changed the situation. Leading by genius player, Pele, Brazil team unprecedentedly won the championship of FIFA World Cup in 1958. Everyone cheered and held carnivals to celebrate their success. With the inspiration of athletics, Brazilians narrowed the gap of diversion, combined together and restored the faith to their country. Thus, the emphasis of supporting athletics in order to build a coherent society is significant.
Another reason drives me to indicate is that the economical facet of sports as an independent industry is essential for the whole country. To be more specific, the chains of sports industry, including broadcasting games, tickets selling, stadium managing, etc, could yield a higher profit margin for the nation. Moreover, government’s financial burden for unemployment will be alleviated since myriad jobs in sports industry are available for numerous people. For example, a research carried by Tokyo University shows that in the long run, the investment spent in sports have positive effect on overall economy. According to their statistic, every $10,000,000 expenditure in the national Olympic teams could bring 13% of profit ratio and decrease 5% of unemployment rate in the following 10 years. Therefore, governments should support athletics for potential economical benefits.
Nevertheless, some people still argue that arts deserves more supporting for it can improve national image. The more talented artists in a country, the more attractive the nation will be. Yet such statement suffers from both logical and factual fallacies, as sports can better act as the same function. With more people participated in, sports is undeniably the mainstream recreation and more capable to attain the same goal than arts.
In a nutshell, judging from what I have mentioned above, I should reinforce my perspective that governments should spend more money to support athletics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2601.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69146608315 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02665768504 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601750547046 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5749474087 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.375 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0416666667 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262684437858 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701359770875 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819752838196 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167465791587 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701802025544 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.72 10.9000537634 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.14 8.01818996416 126% => OK
difficult_words: 161.0 86.8835125448 185% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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