With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery) should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Students today are under pressure to be academically successful; therefore, some people assume schools should exclude non-academic subjects to benefit students' academic performances. In my opinion, I disagree with this idea because studying these subjects can bring valuable advantages to students.
Firstly, non-academic subjects balance students' studying time and health. To be specific, some students may have bad postures and back pain because of spending too much time staying in one position during classes. Therefore, learning subjects such as physical exercise could prevent students from back pain and incorrect postures because it encourages them to exercise and do sports. Researchers from a university in the UK have proved that physical education could improve back health for students, as it prevents students from stiffness after long hours of sitting and allows more time for students to do sports.
Moreover, non-academic subjects can play a role as a means of relaxation for students after stressful lessons. Many students could feel mentally tired after nerve-racking classes and experience a mental breakdown when receiving a bad test result. With the help of subjects such as arts and physical education, they could divert their attention from stressful thoughts and refresh their mind, which would significantly improve students' mental health. According to a research article from a university in China, the number of students experiencing academic burnout has decreased by 10% by learning non-academic subjects with proper instructions from teachers.
In conclusion, I disapprove of removing non-academic subjects from the syllabus as non-academic lessons can better students' back health and help relieve stress from academic pressure.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.77692307692 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93535881298 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569230769231 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9289785906 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.545454545 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6363636364 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346873788033 0.244688304435 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154613923971 0.084324248473 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126979110734 0.0667982634062 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266532446784 0.151304729494 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105814589598 0.056905535591 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.54 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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