Some school leavers travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to university. Do the advantages are more than the disadvantages?
It is a fact of mordern life that some school leavers travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to university. From my point of view, this notion have both benefits and drawbacks with each occupation or each person. The following essay will analyse this statement in detail.
First of all, adolescence development and their career will provided the numerous advantages by taking gap years. Not only dose it improve their knowledge, interested information, traditional value and social experience for teenagers, but also student will have more time for relaxing, taking rest and leaving away from stress. Furthermore, more relationship can be created by the undergrads during gap years such as international friends, aboad student and native people. To illustrate, there was a statistic by Vanvok, the professional scientist which about the succesfull of student in New York, taking gaps years. The percentage of million people was account for majority from this youngs.
On the other hand, during the period of time instead of going directly to university the youngs generation do not have any tutor for guiding, so they will be easier to catch unnecessary mistake. Moreove, a various teenagers will forget their academic knowing which they learn from the course, but also some of them can not avoid to evil social such as addicted to games and drugs.
To conclude, by my agrument from these essay this statement have its own advantages and hamful for the individuals life, so government need to have bright plan to improve teenagers for the development of their nation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ome school leavers travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to university...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ill analyse this statement in detail. First of all, adolescence development an...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
...cence development and their career will provided the numerous advantages by taking gap y...
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Message: Did you mean 'improves'?
Suggestion: improves
...s by taking gap years. Not only dose it improve their knowledge, interested information...
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...account for majority from this youngs. On the other hand, during the period of ...
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...oungs. On the other hand, during the period of time instead of going directly to university...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'teenager'?
Suggestion: teenager
...unnecessary mistake. Moreove, a various teenagers will forget their academic knowing whic...
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...l such as addicted to games and drugs. To conclude, by my agrument from these e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1334.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13076923077 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71249573937 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5051148868 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.272727273 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6363636364 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261134078082 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097839195598 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151971659337 0.0667982634062 228% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153954812447 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0822158892626 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.