A large number of people think that nowadays women should not work hard to earn their living they should spend more time in caring for their families To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

Numerous people hold a strong belief that women should put their emphasis on their families in lieu of spending time earning money. From my perspective, I quite disagree with this viewpoint.

At the outset, I cannot demur the fact that families’ happiness is of paramount importance, especially when maternal instincts and affections are integral for children. These days, in a cut-throat labor market, with such a heavy work load, it’s arduous to reach a more sustainable work-life balance when climbing a career ladder or getting promotion is a determining factor in receiving enough salaries to make ends meet, thus, they have a tendency to make light of their offspring. Not only does that ignorance lead to their committing juvenile crimes or several minor crimes such as shoplifting or pickpocketing, but it also deteriorates family’s bond. For that reason, a house that is taken care of by mothers would have a profound effect on educating and nurturing the nation's future assets/ the future pillars of the nation. To cite an example, in Japan, career path is left behind by a high proportion of women to spend more time at home, as it is mostly mothers that give their offspring a sense of morality.

Notwithstanding, this situation only applies to a tiny minority of instances. First and foremost, one of the rationales for allowing women to work and sharing the housework is to promote gender equality. The fact that merely wives have to sacrifice their occupations for their families seems to be a ridiculously sexual stereotype in which females were moulded into household wives and rendered them less keeping abreast of what was happening around them. In this modern world, women have proven their abilities by holding several vital positions in society, such as Mary Robinson, Ireland's first female president, and other female entrepreneurs. Furthermore, In terms of financial issues, this phenomenon also puts a heavy strain of monetary on the men, who are the breadwinners of the family. No one invariably longs to struggle day by day for their necessities, therefore, male ought to try their best and face the heavy pressure without any moaning, which eventually makes them burnt out and run-down.

In conclusion, while maintaining the happiness of the family is a radical duty of women, I still suppose that they should go out to work to earn their living.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2001.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 391.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11764705882 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83987908777 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613810741688 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.8090725281 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.928571429 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9285714286 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327579235198 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101092781962 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775916467785 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221916443159 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704393929874 0.056905535591 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Numerous people hold a strong belief tha...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2001.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 391.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11764705882 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83987908777 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613810741688 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.8090725281 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.928571429 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9285714286 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327579235198 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101092781962 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775916467785 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221916443159 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704393929874 0.056905535591 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.