Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study Why Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice

Nowadays , many students are likely to find a part - time job to have a salary or learning some experiece in the life . They want to be an independent person , but it has both drawbacks and advantages . Personally , it is not beneficial for students to work before university study.
To begin with , students who go to work before university study can waste their time . It delay students to graduate university and receive a certificate . There are many things in the whole life that students cannot manage all of that . They should make a clearly decision : study or work . As i know , my brother who have just graduated university worked before he had studied , he said me that he was under pressure of work , he could not put up with it . And he regretted to go to work before university study .
On the other hand , it can be clearly seen that study is the shortest way to be successful . Knowledge is very important. The more you study harder , the brighter future you will have . Moreover, study is everyone's duty in the world . If you do not have knowledge , you are nothing . Students who have a degree of university can easily to find a well - paid job . To be specific , most people in Vietnam have a find job or success after they had graduated university . So that , study is very significant .
In my conclusion , students who work before university is not good for them . i believe that students should put their learning first .

Votes
Average: 5.8 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, well, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1165.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63599977229 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 176.041082164 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 379.8 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8321341885 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.3157894737 106.682146367 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.1578947368 20.7667163134 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57894736842 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 37.0 5.01903807615 737% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305267043407 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105012868116 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784905111511 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191973257681 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440460322632 0.056905535591 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 13.0946893788 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 50.2224549098 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.86 12.4159519038 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 8.58950901804 79% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 78.4519038076 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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