You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Outside the standard framework of any educational curriculum, there are endless opportunities for students to learn new skills and boost academic performance. Extracurricular activities such as sports teams, special-interest clubs and art groups is a vital element for students' development.
Write an essay to an educated reader to discuss the advantages and disadvantages of extracurricular activities. Include reasons and any relevant examples to support your answer. You should write at least 250 words. Your response will be evaluated in terms of Task fulfillment, Organization, Vocabulary and Grammar.
Outside the usual framework of any educational syllabus, it has plenty of ways for scholars to acquire new skills and enhance their academic results. Indeed, these days, outdoor activities are becoming one of the most vital parts of students’ development. Some people argue that it brings a lot of benefits to learners. Meanwhile, others think that there are several demerits related to this issue. Discussed below will shed light on both sides of this subject.
To commence with, there are a lot of advantages that outdoor activities have. In the first place, it allows students to express their unique personalities. As they can participate in the special-intertest club, where they will find many like-minded people with the same hobbies. Secondly, taking part in extracurricular activities helps scholars strengthen their muscles. The reason for this is that they provide many kinds of exercises for children to choose from, ranging from solo sports like marathons to team sports such as football, volleyball… Finally, joining outdoor activities will make the students’ friendships stronger. It can easily be seen that when students play some kinds of teambuilding games, they must get on well with their teammates to have an optimal strategy for winning the game. As a consequence, they will build a good relationship with each other.
On the other hand, some people believe that outdoor activities cause several disadvantages. Firstly, it makes students get distracted from their studies, which results in their lower academic performance at school. Secondly, doing this kind of activity can be costly. Because students and their families have to pay for tuition fees and equipment. For example, when students want to take part in a music club, they must ask their parents to buy musical instruments for them. Some kinds of that have cheap prices, but lots of them cost huge money.
In conclusion, the above-mentioned facts have outlined the pros and cons of activities outside the classroom. Its disadvantages should be strictly taken into account. Besides, parents should control their children’s time spent on extracurricular activities to make use of its benefits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...activities to make use of its benefits.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36046511628 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93182404179 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595930232558 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.515029249 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8095238095 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.380952381 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7619047619 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197742013597 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543328474172 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507458885344 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124631189016 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306444684892 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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