You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Nowadays children spend a lot of time using the media such as TV, the radio and the Internet. This has negative effects on children's health and their performance at school. Others believe that the media prepare children for the real world.
To what extent should children be encouraged to use the media?
Write an essay to an educated reader to express your opinion. Include reasons and any relevant examples to support your answer. You should write at least 250 words. Your response will be evaluated in terms of Task fulfillment, Organization, Vocabulary and Grammar.
In this information age, teenagers tend to spend a great deal of time using mass media. Many people believe that it brings a lot of disadvantages as they will get distracted and have lower academic performance. Meanwhile, others argue that this trend can help children in many aspects. Personally, I think that both views have their own merits. Discussed below will shed light on my point of view.
To commence with, it is undeniable that mass media have a great deal of benefits. The main point is that it enables children to broaden their knowledge as it helps them to connect with a vast majority of the freshest information. Therefore, children can easily answer the questions, that they are curious about, by themselves. The second point is mass media is a good way of entertainment. Indeed, TV has many kinds of films, game shows for them to enjoy. And from that, they will avoid suffering from some cognitive impairment or depression.
On the other hand, there are some arguments supporting the idea that mass media cause some bad influences on adolescents. It is convincing to realize that the media make children suffer from some serious health problems such as shortsighted eyes or heart disease. The reason for this is that when children spend most of their time using a computer or watching TV, they will establish a sedentary lifestyle and they will be lazy in doing exercises on a daily basis. Furthermore, the light from television brings a lot of demerits to the eye. Finally, children might get distracted from studying, since they are addicted to the game show on TV or the comedy films on Netflix. As a consequence, it results in bad academic performance.
To sum up, The above-mentioned facts have outlined the pros and cons of this issue. As far as I am concerned, its advantages must be outweighed its drawbacks. Parents should make use of the good aspect and control the time limit their children spend on mass media to avoid its bad effects.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 140, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'realizing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: realizing
...uences on adolescents. It is convincing to realize that the media make children suffer fro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, while, i think, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83136094675 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75342712755 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541420118343 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5303543815 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.65 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283063514163 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749196887972 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702260557612 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174803104918 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396522100067 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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