The argument claims that students in art department in Linford college should take an inernship before graduation in SkyDesigns firm base on past survey. Stated in this way the argment fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion of the arguemnt relies on assumptions for which no clear evidence. Hence, the argument is weak and unconvincing and has several flaws.
First, the arguemnt assums that the best company to have practice in the city is SkyDesigns,this statement is a stretch and not substantiated in any way. While, it maybe other firms have more advanced technology or tools to intern the students befrore graduation. Moreover, what about the other 20 percent of companies that not mentioned in the text, so it is obvious there is no fair comparison. The arguemnt could have been much clearer if it made a comparison on the base of selecting Skyway instaed of the other firms.
Second, the argument claims that SkyDesigns is better for the students without say any thing about the requirments of the students like transportation, so it may be far for some student to go to this company because of the lack of transportation ways. If the argument had provided evidence about how far this firm from the school then the argument would have been a lot more convincing.
Finally, the arguments states that from the 90 percent of the student how participate in the survey only 40 percent of them had taken the internship that's means the survey has some errors or fake results. Without a sufficient answers about why only less than half of the students took the practical practice.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above-mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts related to the survey and the target group of populaion.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 318 350
No. of Characters: 1547 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.223 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.865 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.758 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.404 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.613 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , this
... have practice in the city is SkyDesigns,this statement is a stretch and not substant...
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Line 5, column 84, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
... is better for the students without say any thing about the requirments of the students l...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 253, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...use of the lack of transportation ways. If the argument had provided evidence abo...
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Line 5, column 290, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s. If the argument had provided evidence about how far this firm from the school ...
^^
Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...ercent of them had taken the internship thats means the survey has some errors or fak...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 317.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00630914826 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88331527083 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545741324921 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3703481082 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.357142857 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105495104948 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340416329622 0.0743258471296 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678989016913 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0595636071987 0.128457276422 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509865009607 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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