Some people say that devoting one’s time to family activities is more important than spending time working. Others believe that dedicating one’s time to work is more important. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
It is a common belief that the time a person spends working is more beneficial than the time he or she spends with family. However, there is a more persuasive argument that quality time with one’s family is essential as it strengthens the family bond between members of the family.
On the one hand, spending a certain amount of time working can stabilise the finances of a family. This is because if a worker cannot make money, the overall happiness of his or her family cannot be ensured. Therefore, most people commit their lives to careers. For example, parents will miss out on some events with their children, but that does not indicate they are not interested in their families. It is simply a trade-off they must make. In order to be able to afford their children’s education, parents must work long hours that sometimes separate them from their families.
Nevertheless, I support the idea that spending time with one’s family is more valuable, as both individuals and families are far happier when they have time together. Family activities are usually fun and relaxing, so they can release stress after stressful work. Take a picnic as an example, which is an interesting and funny activity. In this activity, all members will have a lot of valuable memories by doing many things together, such as cooking together, taking a lot of pictures, and so on.
To sum up, while it is apparent that time used for working is sometimes more crucial than family time, it is undeniable that enjoying family time is more important and needs to be a priority.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, while, for example, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1302.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84014869888 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58660737658 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576208178439 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4235930706 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.153846154 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368916349851 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122960788558 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132434010939 0.0667982634062 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25067996073 0.151304729494 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108311966549 0.056905535591 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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