A central plaza store owner has sent letter to an editor in order to advocate for closing skateboarding in central plaza. However, this argument is based on incomplete evidence relating decreased number of shoppers, decreased business, increased litter and vandalism while failing to consider possibility of business with skateboarders and other people who come there. Thus, the evidence should be further analyzed and evidences should be prepared based on more research and analysis.
Firstly, the author has related decreased number of shops and business to skateboarding without deeper study. There can be plethora of reasons that precipitate into falling business. For instance, there can be concommitant growth of other business center in the town, causing decline business from the point. Mostly, business in one city center decreases significantly with decentralization of markets. Growth of other business hubs around the city should be examined and city center is supposed to employ competitive offers in order to increase their market share. Further, data on national or regional economic status should also be analyzed. If this is the case of nationwide recession or economic stagnation, people shift their hard earned money towards only essential things and business may have slowed down. Thus, the question "How can you announce skateboarding as sole cause of business decline?" should be answered first.
Secondly, The author should answer whether skateboarding has increased litter around the city or not and how he can consider closing skateboarding as a single solution to this. Similar to previous case, increased litter can have multiple causes. decreased dustbin, less tight legislature regarding waste production and disposal are few among many. If this is the case, it can be solved by increased dustbin and tighter legislature can solve without any need to banning skateboarding from the city center. Further, even if skateboarding is related to increased litter and vandalism around city center, government can impose stronger legislature and punishment if somebody is throwing litter haphazardly. This way, city center can continue skateboarding while keeping environment clean and green.
Further, the author fails to consider business opportunity from skateboarders. They can bring discount offers targeting skateboarders where skateboarders get better discount while shopping or they can make skateboarding companies agree to provide certain discount to those who perform shopping at city center. This should be considered before coming into hasty generalization that skateboarding is decreasing their market.
It maybe true that city center has currently losing its business opportunities to skateboarding but before reaching that conclusion, abovementioned questions should be answered first. By answering those questions and performing further studies can bolster author's argument regarding closure of skateboarding at city center.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 437 350
No. of Characters: 2478 1500
No. of Different Words: 229 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.572 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.67 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.971 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 213 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 156 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 120 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.81 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.109 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.348 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 247, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Decreased
...reased litter can have multiple causes. decreased dustbin, less tight legislature regardi...
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Line 3, column 454, Rule ID: NEED_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'need to ban'?
Suggestion: need to ban
...ghter legislature can solve without any need to banning skateboarding from the city center. Fur...
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Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'trues'?
Suggestion: trues
... is decreasing their market. It maybe true that city center has currently losing i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2540.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 437.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.81235697941 5.12650576532 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03204265791 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530892448513 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 790.2 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.2151836075 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.454545455 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8636363636 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68181818182 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190524835386 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656552087249 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669332472151 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122471111924 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0778799598296 0.0628817314937 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 48.3550499002 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.42 12.5979740519 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 98.500998004 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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