The general welfare of a nation's people is a better indication of that nation's
greatness than are the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most
compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
A nation can be deemed to be great if it can assert its dominance in every sector of life including health, economy and defence. These factors are goverened by the vast majority of its population, who actually work in these sectors, and ensure progress of the country. Notably, these people will ensure the progress of their nation only if they feel that the nation is taking care of them, and that they get to enjoy the benefits of the country’s overall progress. Hence, the welfare of the general public is crucial for a country’s greatness.
The artists of a nation are representative of the country’s cultural heritage, and have very little to do with its current global status. Global dominance depends on how progressive a nation is, and how willingly it accepts modernisation and globalisation, so that it can ensure a good . Hence, an artist’s achievements do not tell much about the nation’s greatness. Similarly, a scientist’s inventions would only inform us about the intellectual asset of the country, but if these are not used for the welfare of the general public, they would not contribute to making the country great. A ruler might be successful in his tenure and might have received multiple awards, but unless and until his decisions turn out to be beneficial to the common man, it would not have any impact on the nation.
But it should also be noted that, when these elements of the society work for the noble cause of national development, they can do wonders to the country’s global status. An artist whose artefacts reflect the nation’s qualities can lead to the nation getting global attention, and thus increase tourism. A scientist’s invention, if implemented in a way to benefit the nation, can lead to a better standard of living for the citizens. If a rules takes into account the progress of the nation in the health, economic and defence sectors instead of his own interests while making decisions, the country would rise to power on the global stage.
Hence, I believe that the quality of life of the general public is of utmost importance while trying to decide the greatness of the nation. But rulers, artist, or scientists can also contribute to the nation’s progress by ensuring that their achievements align with the interests of the country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 492, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...all progress. Hence, the welfare of the general public is crucial for a country’s greatness. ...
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Line 3, column 286, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...balisation, so that it can ensure a good . Hence, an artist’s achievements do not ...
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Line 3, column 519, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ese are not used for the welfare of the general public, they would not contribute to making th...
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Line 7, column 50, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...believe that the quality of life of the general public is of utmost importance while trying to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, if, similarly, so, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 387.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96382428941 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80763098393 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49354005168 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0396014709 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.066666667 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86666666667 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20929263458 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838051011517 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039211600309 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150001387592 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285584366411 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.