A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Educational systems differ in different countries and cultures. Asian countries such as Japan and Korea, it seems to focus more on preparing students to enter university and thus has a system and atmosphere that leans more towards on getting high test scores from elementary school throughout high school. In European and American countries, the system appears to be more flexible and adheres to each students' life interest, since entering university is less of a required option. The prompt states it is necessary to have all students in one singal nation to adapt to the same curriculum up untill college eduaction. I disagree with this statement as I believe that education should have customized option to an extent for every individulal.
Having the same curriculum for all students until their enrollment in university may create confusion and hinder their abilites as to where their experties and interests lie. For example, as previously mentioned about how Asian countries tend to adopt an identical curriculum for all students before college, working toward a common goal: entering university, they may be too distracted and exhausted from studying subjects they are not interested in for 12 years not beacuse they want to but it is required. Thus, it is common for Asian students to not know what major they would like to choose upon completing the college entrance exam, since all they have been know to do is to be good at getting a high test score.
One may counter that the same curriculum engenders fairness in judging students' abilities before college. Nevertheless, it is not fair to start with because every individual has a variety of skillsets and passion that cannot be identical to one another. Therefore, forcing students to study the same subject with the same criteria for 10 plus years seem illogical and unfair in this sense.
In conclusion, it is my belief that schools should communicate with students and find out what each of them would like to pursue at each stage and separate the curriculum accoridngly for different students. It is only though this approach that every single person can recieve appropriate education and maximize their abilites after college and really contribute to society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 402, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...to be more flexible and adheres to each students life interest, since entering universit...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
...entrance exam, since all they have been know to do is to be good at getting a high t...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 364.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14835164835 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69979336112 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549450549451 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.1473523237 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.153846154 118.986275619 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76923076923 5.21951772744 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311501714499 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100110153299 0.0831039109588 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874829385754 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164150481863 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602528404905 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.1392134831 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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