The charts below show the percentages of the water used in different sectors in Sydney Australia in 1997 and 2007

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The charts below show the percentages of the water used in different sectors in Sydney, Australia in 1997 and 2007.

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of water utilized for various purposes, namely food, service, building, household, and manufacturing, in Sydney, Australia, in 1997 and 2007.

Overall, it can be seen that the majority of water is used for the food industry in two periods, while the amount of water required for the building industry accounted for the least compared with others.

It is undeniable that, in 1997, the amount of water needed for the food industry accounted for 48%, which was the largest proportion compared to others. During the same time frame, while water
consumption in manufacturing tripled that in the building industry, there were 13% and 19% of the water required for service and household use, respectively.

In the next ten years, the percentage of water used in the food
industry was not challenged, despite a slight drop of 7%. In the same year, households consumed 21% of water, which was roughly doubled the figure in manufacturing. In terms of the remaining fields, whereas the service industry is composed of one-fourth of water use, there was only 2% of the water needed for the building industry

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 167, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ly doubled the figure in manufacturing. In terms of the remaining fields, whereas ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 962.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 188.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1170212766 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77316981111 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521276595745 0.547539520022 95% => OK
syllable_count: 287.1 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.271425594 43.030603864 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.428571429 112.824112599 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8571428571 22.9334400587 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.23603664747 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211360488493 0.215688989381 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112720396827 0.103423049105 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631859010742 0.0843802449381 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131845178899 0.15604864568 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682709194469 0.0819641961636 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.2329268293 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 61.2550243902 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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