Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
The aims and aspirations of any young person or their "dreams" must be healthily encouraged by their parents, mentors and caretakers. The assumption that these high and lofty ideas they have for themselves are selfish should be thoroughly disregared. The dreams of a young boy who seeks to be a doctor does not stop him from achieveing other altruistic goals in his life and future. I strongly disagree with the prompt and will elaborate below.
When famed neurosurgeon Ben Carson sought to become a pediatric doctor, he of course could not have imagined the fame and recognition that would come with something like that. He simply wanted to help sick and dying children. That was his dream, his motivator through the intense and grueling process of becoming a doctor. Neurosurgoens have to be the most skilled at their job, due to the nature of their subjects. One wrong move and a life is chnged forever. The goals that can be accomplished in the achievment of a dream can change lives and the world at large. That is as selfless as it gets.
Dreams can be a strong motivator to co-operation amongst a seemingly unrelated group of people. Renowned civil right activist and preacher Martin Luther King Jr. shocked the world in the 1960s as he spearheaded the call to civil reform in the United States. Marginalized people from across the country listened to his speeches and rose up in peaceful protests and walks which forced the hand of the government into succumbing to the will of the people. His most famous speech "I have a dream" resonated with the most downtrodden of the time. His dream of civil freedom had become a shared goal for millions of people. The recognition and attention that comes from a dream fulfilled is a by-product of hardwork and determination.
That is not to say that selfish dreams do not exist, they most certainly do. Generals who take to war with dreams of glorious honor and recognition from battle have dreams. It is the lowly foot soldier who will end up paying the ultimate price for these delusions of grandeur. The goal of war serves no one but the loss of human life. These examples of backwards and selfish dreams are sparsely accomplished because the goal of a person is a reflection of who they are. The emphasis of a career should be actualized with what the indiviual is most suited to do.
As a society, we must not condition the younger generation to only take on jobs that are economically or financially viable as a means of keeping poverty away. Instead we must garner an appreciation for the jobs, works, art that might not seem profitable but bring a smile to peoples faces. Without such we would lose the arts, music and a whole plethora of unknown and untapped skills and talents.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 262, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...elfish should be thoroughly disregared. The dreams of a young boy who seeks to be a...
^^^
Line 9, column 161, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...ble as a means of keeping poverty away. Instead we must garner an appreciation for the ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2291.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 478.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79288702929 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72725766749 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543933054393 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0108897898 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1153846154 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3846153846 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.846153846154 5.21951772744 16% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162614603335 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413941747455 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352689879433 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0869293664509 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398535923713 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 262, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...elfish should be thoroughly disregared. The dreams of a young boy who seeks to be a...
^^^
Line 9, column 161, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...ble as a means of keeping poverty away. Instead we must garner an appreciation for the ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2291.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 478.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79288702929 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72725766749 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543933054393 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0108897898 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1153846154 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3846153846 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.846153846154 5.21951772744 16% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162614603335 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413941747455 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352689879433 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0869293664509 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398535923713 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.