There is hotly debated issue which discussed fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The discussion is mainly about the role of a father and a mother to their offspring. Some people argue that a dad should play an equally important role as a mom plays. This idea is against the argument that women should take the responsibility to bring up and nurture the children if they are the one to decide whether to have babies.
First and foremost, I agree that fatherhood should be emphasised as much as motherhood as both parties have different roles to play in rearing up their children. From my point of view, a father is a tough character in which he has to work to make ends meet, he is the bread winner of the family. In other words, he can also be described as the backbone of the family. Therefore, it is important that a father should demonstrate his tough characteristic to the children so that the children understand they have to put effort to make hard earned money. The value of life is important to children especially when they are growing up so that they would make lesser mistakes in their life.
As for the motherhood, the role played by a mother should be to show more care to her children. In the past, a mother was characterised as a person who take care of her home and cook for the family members. Although there is a change in today’s world where many mothers work during the day time, the role portrayed in the past should be played. However, it cannot be assumed that mother has the sole responsibility to her children. When a mother is willing to sacrifice her time and beauty to give birth, a father should treasure her sacrifice and take up the responsibility to rear the children.
The environment of where the child is bringing up is important to his or her physical and mental development. Thus, fatherhood and motherhood should be equally emphasised. It is surprising to notice that people always have a great celebration on Mother’s Day than on Father’s Day even though a father works hard to make money in order to cover the daily expenditures of a household. In my opinion, the purpose of having celebration for Parent’s Day is to recognize their contribution and their roles and responsibility to the family. It is important to give recognition to their devotion of time to the family. I have to confess that both of the parents are the role models to their children in which one is a tough character and the other one is a soft and loving character.
To sum up, I totally agree that fatherhood is as equally important as motherhood and thus, they should be emphasised. It is not fair for a mother to have sole responsibility to nurture her children even though she might be the one to decide on having babies. The roles of a father and a mother can have a prolong effect on the mindset of a child. It is said that parents are the mirrors if the children and a good child is nurtured by parents with love and care.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 305, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...roles of a father and a mother can have a prolong effect on the mindset of a child. It is...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'as for', 'as to', 'in my opinion', 'in other words', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.231304347826 0.247107183377 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.172173913043 0.155533422707 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0573913043478 0.0946595960268 61% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0365217391304 0.0501214627716 73% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0626086956522 0.0437548338989 143% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114782608696 0.122226691241 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0313043478261 0.0403226058552 78% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75739389065 2.80594681477 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0573913043478 0.0326793684256 176% => OK
Particles: 0.0104347826087 0.00163938923432 637% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.114782608696 0.0861772015684 133% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0260869565217 0.021408717616 122% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0139130434783 0.011925033212 117% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2987.0 1933.35771543 154% => OK
No of words: 536.0 316.048096192 170% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57276119403 6.12580529183 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.20517956788 114% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.30223880597 0.374742101984 81% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.203358208955 0.28420135186 72% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.147388059701 0.203846283523 72% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.111940298507 0.137316102897 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75739389065 2.80594681477 98% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.037074148 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.397388059701 0.56093040696 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.8624292569 60.7387585426 76% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0891783567 149% => OK
Sentence length: 22.3333333333 20.7743622355 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9422426664 49.517814964 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.458333333 127.492653851 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.7743622355 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.541666666667 0.814263465372 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 42.6691542289 49.1944974215 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.39102564103 1.69124875643 82% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460737642476 0.332605444948 139% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.128599625786 0.102741220458 125% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0882062832444 0.0668466124924 132% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.547104421477 0.534860350844 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130458021841 0.148594505496 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.200946778191 0.134430193775 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089507550789 0.0742795772207 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.541550241619 0.324371583561 167% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0611854861845 0.0638462369009 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.357207277893 0.228012699653 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497674197254 0.058150111329 86% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.68436873747 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.41683366733 205% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 15.0 5.90881763527 254% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 10.4468937876 182% => OK
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9