It is not surprising to notice that almost everyone walking on the street is listening to music by using either MP3 or hand phones. In addition, people choose to listen to the type of music based on their taste and preference. With a variety if demands in term of music, there are many different types of music and songs being composed in the world today. In my country, Malaysia, people’s preference on music are more to K-Pop music. In this essay, I will discuss on the reasons why we need music and whether the traditional music of a country is more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays.
First and foremost, we need music in our daily life as music can relax our minds and reduce our stress in the daily routine works. According to a prominent psychologist, he mentioned that listening to classical music before going to bed can provide our bodies a good sleep at night as the classical music has a very slow rhythm and soft melody. It can reduce our tension after long working hours. It is surprising to note that people who rarely listen to music have high level of stress and are more likely to commit suicide as a result as compared to people who listen to music every day. Therefore, in order to keep our mentally healthy, we should listen to music in our spare time or when we are in the car after working hours.
Secondly, people need music because it is one of the hot topics discussed among friends. Nowadays, there are many youngsters listen to K-Pop music and their idols are Korean celebrities. They listen to music that match their personality. They are considered out of date if they do not listen to K-Pop music. Apart from that, people need music for party or any kind of celebration. For instance, in my cousin’s wedding party which was held few weeks ago, I notice the music played by the party are of variety kinds.
In my opinion, I feel that both the traditional music of a country and the International music are equally important for the people. The traditional music of the country enables people to be more nationalistic and it tells people’s culture through the lyrics and melodies of the music. In contrast, the International music is very important to the world today as it is the leader of the world music and it shows what type of music is popular in the world. For instance, when my mother was young, people in that era used to listen to western style music such as the songs of Michael Jackson. In today’s world, many people still listen to his songs and other western style music such as the songs of Justin Bieber and Selena Gomez.
In conclusion, when people have leisure time, they shall listen to music to relieve stress before engaging to daily routine works again. It is important for our mental health and keeps us to stay positive and be more optimistic. Besides, the traditional music of a country and the International music are both important to us as the traditional music represents our culture while the International music is the footstep of fashion.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... if demands in term of music, there are many different types of music and songs being composed...
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'while', 'apart from', 'for instance', 'i feel', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'in contrast', 'kind of', 'such as', 'as a result', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.265410958904 0.247107183377 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.145547945205 0.155533422707 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.083904109589 0.0946595960268 89% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0359589041096 0.0501214627716 72% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0667808219178 0.0437548338989 153% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128424657534 0.122226691241 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0325342465753 0.0403226058552 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.53869121448 2.80594681477 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0479452054795 0.0326793684256 147% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0787671232877 0.0861772015684 91% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0102739726027 0.021408717616 48% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0171232876712 0.011925033212 144% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3063.0 1933.35771543 158% => OK
No of words: 538.0 316.048096192 170% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69330855019 6.12580529183 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.20517956788 115% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.310408921933 0.374742101984 83% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.189591078067 0.28420135186 67% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.126394052045 0.203846283523 62% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0985130111524 0.137316102897 72% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53869121448 2.80594681477 90% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.037074148 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438661710037 0.56093040696 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.0598568796 60.7387585426 84% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0891783567 149% => OK
Sentence length: 22.4166666667 20.7743622355 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6293757415 49.517814964 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.625 127.492653851 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4166666667 20.7743622355 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.791666666667 0.814263465372 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 41.3757744734 49.1944974215 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.71724137931 1.69124875643 102% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.578852112406 0.332605444948 174% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.151086283011 0.102741220458 147% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.102047943039 0.0668466124924 153% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.560234560599 0.534860350844 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.119187551257 0.148594505496 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.250964370567 0.134430193775 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158944456168 0.0742795772207 214% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.465896498567 0.324371583561 144% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.1078999894 0.0638462369009 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.437047052483 0.228012699653 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123116523545 0.058150111329 212% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.68436873747 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.41683366733 263% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 5.90881763527 203% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 1.9629258517 408% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 22.0 10.4468937876 211% => OK
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9