Climate change is now an accepted threat to our planet, but there is not enough political action to control excessive consumerism and pollution. Do you agree?
Global warming is an important problem to our earth, but there is not adequate attempt from the government to reduce exaggerate consumerism and environmental issues. I agree with this statement because it can be seen many symptoms that our planet has climate change. One of them our earth becomes hotter than before and natural disaster had happened everywhere.
In my opinion, the government has not given the best solution about global warming. The rule is published for temporary time. It prohibits society to make plastic for short time. Because the government just publishes the rules about payment the plastic, but not given the real solution to replace plastic with another bag is made from recycled material. The bag can be made from banana leaf. Because banana leaves bear fruit one time only.
One of excessive consumerism effects is raising plastic trash. More consumption makes more plastic rubbish. Rising consumerism can be decreased by saving energy and using recycling thins in human activity. It can be seen when the people begin consuming more than they needed, boundaries are removed. Excessive consumption leads to bigger houses, trendier clothes, fancier technology and excessive use of cars. It means a person uses one car. Meanwhile, the fuel usage is more than what is needed. Because of that, more rubbish is thrown until no place to keep it. After that energy from our earth like oil, gas and water become less until the energy is difficult to be founded.
Besides that, pollution is one of sources that cause global warming. In the capital city or large city, many vehicles like car and motorcycles in the street until became traffic jam. Because of many vehicles so that it can produce much pollution that source from vehicle. Thus meanwhile become air pollution. Air pollution is the most prominent and dangerous form of pollution. The effects of the air pollution are evident too. Release of hazardous gases into the air causes global warming.
One of ways for decreasing global warming, the government must publish rules about make bag from recycling materials like banana leaves, second society must be give education about do not became highest consumption and save energy. Third the government must create comfortable public transportation, so air pollution can be decreased.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2019-07-23 | anuannam | 78 | view |
| 2016-06-17 | dediharun | 78 | view |
| 2014-08-27 | WEBSTER_KAMPUNG_INGGRIS_PARE | 40 | view |
| 2014-08-27 | WEBSTER_KAMPUNG_INGGRIS_PARE | 77 | view |
- Housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries around the world, what any some of the man factors that have contributed to this problem? What can be done to help reduce the number of homeless people?Give reasons for your answer and 52
- Because of the pressure of new subject such as business studies, many schools have dropped sport or physical education (PE) from the curriculum. How important is sport or PE in a young person’s education? 61
- Some People believe that students should always learn in a group rather than study individually. To what extent do you? 52
- Nowadays more people are choosing to live with friends or alone rather than with their families This trend is likely to have a negative impact on communities To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion 61
- Today, the high sales of popular consumer good reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 58
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Global warming is an important problem to our earth, but there is not adequate attempt from the government to reduce exaggerate consumerism and environmental issues
Global warming is a big problem to our earth, but there is not adequate attempt from the government to reduce exaggerated consumerism and environmental issues
because it can be seen many symptoms that our planet has climate change.
because it can be seen from many symptoms that our planet has climate change.
Because the government just publishes the rules about payment the plastic, but not given the real solution to replace plastic with another bag is made from recycled material.
Description: two verbs in one sentence. can you re-write this sentence?
Sentence: In the capital city or large city, many vehicles like car and motorcycles in the street until became traffic jam.
Description: A conjunction, subordinating is not usually followed by a verb, past tense
Suggestion: Refer to until and became
Sentence: One of ways for decreasing global warming, the government must publish rules about make bag from recycling materials like banana leaves, second society must be give education about do not became highest consumption and save energy.
Description: A negator is not usually followed by a verb, past tense
Suggestion: Refer to not and became
flaws:
It is not exactly right on the topic for the third paragraph and fourth paragraph. The second paragraph is OK.
------------------------
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.889 21.0 //More compound or complex sentences/clauses wanted. Read more essays by top users and follow their writing skills:
http://www.testbig.com/users/sfaht1
http://www.testbig.com/users/mrmo2610
http://www.testbig.com/users/nader
http://www.testbig.com/users/subodh860
http://www.testbig.com/users/azizkhan
http://www.testbig.com/users/newuser
http://www.testbig.com/users/misterwandering
http://www.testbig.com/users/elaine-10
http://www.testbig.com/users/habiba
http://www.testbig.com/users/mandy192q
http://www.testbig.com/users/grt2bagal
http://www.testbig.com/users/nikita
http://testbig.com/users/pip-depp
http://testbig.com/users/lynmelissa
http://testbig.com/users/justin
http://testbig.com/users/shi24
http://testbig.com/users/shokh
http://www.testbig.com/users/hao
http://www.testbig.com/users/laurieannbantiling
http://www.testbig.com/users/dmelen
http://www.testbig.com/users/sunuwar42
http://www.testbig.com/users/kenoky
http://www.testbig.com/users/sara83
http://www.testbig.com/users/xthangbm
and more:
http://www.testbig.com/essay-categories/ielts
--------------------
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2 //you still have grammatical issues. Read a good grammar book.
--------------------
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 9
Category: ? Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 375 350
No. of Characters: 1890 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.401 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.04 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.499 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.073 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.296 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.268 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.472 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
I'm sorry sir, in my essay
I'm sorry sir, in my essay evaluation report i can not see my score, can you help me ?
thank you
When the essay is not right
When the essay is not right on the topic, we used:
Final score: ? out of 9
? means it is less than 5.0
--------------------
need to write the essay in this way:
para 1: introduction
para 2: yes, there are political actions to control excessive consumerism and pollution
para 3: however, it is not enough. first, ...second...
para 4: it needs more political actions....
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
.... The bag can be made from banana leaf. Because banana leaves bear fruit one time only....
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 273, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...uch pollution that source from vehicle. Thus meanwhile become air pollution. Air pol...
^^^^
Line 9, column 189, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'became the highest'.
Suggestion: became the highest
...ety must be give education about do not became highest consumption and save energy. Third the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 336, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ion, so air pollution can be decreased.
^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'but', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'thus', 'while', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.262019230769 0.247107183377 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.173076923077 0.155533422707 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.112980769231 0.0946595960268 119% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0408653846154 0.0501214627716 82% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0336538461538 0.0437548338989 77% => OK
Prepositions: 0.120192307692 0.122226691241 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0552884615385 0.0403226058552 137% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.56522245083 2.80594681477 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0168269230769 0.0326793684256 51% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0673076923077 0.0861772015684 78% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0216346153846 0.021408717616 101% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00961538461538 0.011925033212 81% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2325.0 1933.35771543 120% => OK
No of words: 375.0 316.048096192 119% => OK
Chars per words: 6.2 6.12580529183 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20517956788 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.392 0.374742101984 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.301333333333 0.28420135186 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.192 0.203846283523 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.136 0.137316102897 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56522245083 2.80594681477 91% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.037074148 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557333333333 0.56093040696 99% => OK
Word variations: 63.0075778769 60.7387585426 104% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0891783567 168% => OK
Sentence length: 13.8888888889 20.7743622355 67% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9089275591 49.517814964 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1111111111 127.492653851 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8888888889 20.7743622355 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.333333333333 0.814263465372 41% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.99599198397 100% => OK
Readability: 44.0222222222 49.1944974215 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.76699029126 1.69124875643 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224644387813 0.332605444948 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.10705335217 0.102741220458 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0901205928337 0.0668466124924 135% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.438169556989 0.534860350844 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.142868140189 0.148594505496 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701056925289 0.134430193775 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733934729715 0.0742795772207 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.216445442289 0.324371583561 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0151657695215 0.0638462369009 24% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147451523324 0.228012699653 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100846859147 0.058150111329 173% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.68436873747 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 3.41683366733 380% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 5.90881763527 135% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.5751503006 116% => OK
Neutral topic words: 10.0 1.9629258517 509% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 21.0 10.4468937876 201% => OK
---------------------
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations to cover all aspects.