"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on blue highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time.The favored proposal of the motorists lobby is to widen the highway,adding an additional lane of traffic.But last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it.A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to blue highway.Many area residents are keen bicyclists.A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute,and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase".
There are many problems which arise from increase in traffic .There is problem related to commuting time of commuters as the traffic is increased during peak hours,it becomes difficult for commuters to reach their office on time and vice versa.The increase in traffic can also lead to various other problems.The proposal is to widen a highway but in order to sound convincing and inorder to be persuasive the author needs to subsume a lot more relevant information on how to reduce traffic during peak hours.The information described here is not as convincing as it needs to be in order to influence oneself to believe that widening a highway can reduce the traffic during peak hours and thus widening a highway would be the solution in reducing the traffic problem during peak hours.
The author says that the increase in traffic can be lessen by including an additional lane by widening the blue highway according to one favored proposal.But then the author says that widening a lane lead to increased traffic in green highway.The result of widening a highway in nearby area cannot have influence on the highway which is to be widened.One cannot rely on the information related to widening the highway in the nearby area.
There is also a mention about the better alternative which states that the bicycle lane should be added to a blue highway.There is no further cogent information to buttress this information as it is stated that this is the better alternative but there is no relevant information related to whether this the better alternative or not.
Further it is given that the residents of many areas are keen bicyclists but the information to support this statement is not specified.Even if the residents are keen bicyclists there may be possibility that they may not use their bicycles to commute between the places and that the bicycle lane may not be properly utilized.Therefore,the traffic during rush hours may not be significantly reduced.It is stated that many area residents are keen bicyclists but in those many areas whether this area will be included or not cannot be concluded from the information given and therefore whether these areas with keen bicyclists have contributed to the reduction in traffic is also not specified clearly.
Thus, the author in order to sound more persuasive should include more information to buttress this argument and also provide relevant information related to the interests of the common people.Thus,the author should provide sufficient information in order to support this information.
- "Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on blue highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time.The favored proposal of the motorists lobby is to widen the highway,adding an additional lane of traffic.But last 50
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.238979118329 0.25644967241 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.204176334107 0.15541462614 131% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0719257540603 0.0836205057962 86% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0649651972158 0.0520304965353 125% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0185614849188 0.0272364105082 68% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118329466357 0.125424944231 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0696055684455 0.0416121511921 167% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.96247097581 2.79052419416 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0580046403712 0.026700313972 217% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.113689095128 0.113004496875 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0348027842227 0.0255425247493 136% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0116009280742 0.0127820249294 91% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2556.0 2731.13054187 94% => OK
No of words: 416.0 446.07635468 93% => OK
Chars per words: 6.14423076923 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.389423076923 0.378187486979 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.307692307692 0.287650121315 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.199519230769 0.208842608468 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.141826923077 0.135150697306 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96247097581 2.79052419416 106% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 207.018472906 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.384615384615 0.469332199767 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 41.0039661606 52.1807786196 79% => OK
How many sentences: 5.0 20.039408867 25% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 83.2 23.2022227129 359% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 199.07787421 57.7814097925 345% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 511.2 141.986410481 360% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 83.2 23.2022227129 359% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.6 0.724660767414 221% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 3.58251231527 530% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 113.969230769 51.9672348444 219% => OK
Elegance: 1.48387096774 1.8405768891 81% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.485399716356 0.441005458295 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.304648918899 0.135418324435 225% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0958511322623 0.0829849096947 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 1.0 0.58762219726 170% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 1.92296268638e-16 0.147661913831 0% => Sentences are similar to each other in a paragraph.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.32305695543 0.193483328276 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0990311345519 0.0970749176394 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.360749763171 0.42659136922 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.102213364904 0.0774707102158 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.32305695543 0.312017818177 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0990311345519 0.0698173142475 142% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.87684729064 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 5.36822660099 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 5.0 14.657635468 34% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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