TPO 13
The reading and the lecture are both about fossils, which is about selling and buying them by private collectors. The author of the reading believes that it is a very bad for universityies and other general public such as museums. The lecture casts doubt on the claims made in the article. She thinks that the author exaggerated about the influence of selling fossils to wealthy fossils buyers.
First of all, the author claims that selling fossils to private owners make it difficult for other people to watch these fossils. This point is challenged by the lecture. She says that private collectors discover many fossils. Furthermore, she points out that even uninversities and museums and other public institutions do not have problem to buy fossils.
Secondly, the author states that scientists need to study on the fossils and they do not have access to the fossils for research. So, they miss many essential discoveries. This argument is rebutted by the lecture. She suggests it is not realistic. She elaborates on this mentioning that scientists recieve every fossils are discovered and they are the only persons that allowed to do any experiments on them. Thus do not miss any important point about them.
Finally, the author mentions that commercial fossil collectors do not care about the any other worthy evidence about surrondings of these fossils. The lecture, on the other hand, feels that there are many fossils that they discover and scientists must not be concern about how this fossils lie in the ground because they can find their answers among these many fossils.
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Essay evaluation report
The reading and the lecture are both about fossils, which is about selling and buying them by private collectors.
Description: 'which' ,'them' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
it is a very bad for universityies
it is a very bad idea for universities
selling fossils to private owners make it
selling fossils to private owners makes it
scientists recieve every fossils are discovered and they are the only persons
Description: can you re-write this sentence? a lot of errors
Thus do not miss any important point about them.
Description: 'them' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
there are many fossils that they discover
Description: 'they' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
must not be concern about
must not concern about
Sentence: The lecture, on the other hand, feels that there are many fossils that they discover and scientists must not be concern about how this fossils lie in the ground because they can find their answers among these many fossils.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and fossils
Sentence: The author of the reading believes that it is a very bad for universityies and other general public such as museums.
Error: universityies Suggestion: universities
Sentence: Furthermore, she points out that even uninversities and museums and other public institutions do not have problem to buy fossils.
Error: uninversities Suggestion: universities
Sentence: She elaborates on this mentioning that scientists recieve every fossils are discovered and they are the only persons that allowed to do any experiments on them.
Error: recieve Suggestion: receive
Sentence: Finally, the author mentions that commercial fossil collectors do not care about the any other worthy evidence about surrondings of these fossils.
Error: surrondings Suggestion: surroundings
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 16 12
No. of Words: 262 250
No. of Characters: 1294 1200
No. of Different Words: 125 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.023 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.939 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.474 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.006 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.522 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.172 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 200, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... a very bad for universityies and other general public such as museums. The lecture casts doub...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 232, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d other general public such as museums. The lecture casts doubt on the claims made ...
^^^
Line 7, column 278, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...cientists must not be concern about how this fossils lie in the ground because they ...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'such as', 'first of all', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.223776223776 0.261695866417 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.171328671329 0.158904122519 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0874125874126 0.0723426182421 121% => OK
Adverbs: 0.048951048951 0.0435111971325 113% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0594405594406 0.0277247811725 214% => OK
Prepositions: 0.122377622378 0.128828473217 95% => OK
Participles: 0.027972027972 0.0370669169778 75% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.55904004932 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0244755244755 0.0208969081088 117% => OK
Particles: 0.0034965034965 0.00154638098197 226% => OK
Determiners: 0.118881118881 0.128158765124 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00699300699301 0.0158828679856 44% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0174825174825 0.0114777025283 152% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1588.0 1645.83664459 96% => OK
No of words: 262.0 271.125827815 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.06106870229 6.08160592843 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.04852973271 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.358778625954 0.374372842146 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.286259541985 0.287516216867 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175572519084 0.187439937562 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0992366412214 0.113142543107 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55904004932 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492366412214 0.539623497131 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.4901532717 53.8517498576 86% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0529801325 123% => OK
Sentence length: 16.375 21.7502111507 75% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0489161058 49.3711431718 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.25 132.220823453 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.375 21.7502111507 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.878197800319 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.39072847682 88% => OK
Readability: 45.0009541985 50.5018328374 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.3375 1.90840788429 70% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.681635464863 0.549887131256 124% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.131513485978 0.142949733639 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.095635728645 0.0787303798458 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.524008670977 0.631733273073 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.195799016419 0.139662658121 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.269175023836 0.266732575781 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15636039134 0.103435571967 151% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.43414100679 0.414875509568 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.023422474042 0.0530846634433 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.510150321057 0.40443939384 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649963917337 0.0528353158467 123% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.26048565121 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.49668874172 114% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.62251655629 138% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 3.1766004415 126% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.2958057395 126% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.