TPO23-INTEGRATED
The reading and the lecture are both about populations of the yellow cedar and the causes of decreasing the numbers them in North America. The reading provided three reasons but the professor rejected these reasons and he believes none of the reasons in the reading are not adequate.
First of all, the author claims that insects and specially bark beetle are cause to many damages to these trees and they are good candidate for killing the yellow cedar. But in contrary, the professor says that the yellow cedar are more resistent than other trees against these beetles and there is a powerful medical in these trees that allowed them to denfence toward insects. So, it is unlikely to consider these insects as a possible cause for killing the yellow cedar.
Secondly, the author states that eating the tree bark by bears is another reasons for decline the number of the yellow cedars. But in contrast, this argument is rebutted by the lecture. He suggests decline of the yellow cedar accures in mainlands and islands, but there are no bears in islands. Thus the bears are not responsible for decreasing the the yellow cedar.
Finally, the author mentions that changing in the climate affected the root systems of the yellow cedar and causes them to be freezed. So, freezing the roots causes damage to the whole tree. But the lecture, on the other hand, feels that the author forgets that the decline has seen more in lower elevations while the lower elevations are more warmer than higher elevation. Furthermore, the climate is not good reason too.
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Essay evaluation report
he believes none of the reasons in the reading are not adequate.
he believes none of the reasons in the reading are adequate.
insects and specially bark beetle are cause to many damages to these trees and they are good candidate for killing the yellow cedar.
insects and specially bark beetle cause to many damages to these trees which are good candidates for killing the yellow cedar.
Sentence: Secondly, the author states that eating the tree bark by bears is another reasons for decline the number of the yellow cedars.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to another and reasons
He suggests decline of the yellow cedar accures in mainlands
He suggests that the decline of the yellow cedar accuses in mainlands
Sentence: Thus the bears are not responsible for decreasing the the yellow cedar.
Description: The token the is not usually followed by an article
Suggestion: Refer to the and the
are more warmer than higher elevation
are much warmer than higher elevation
Sentence: But in contrary, the professor says that the yellow cedar are more resistent than other trees against these beetles and there is a powerful medical in these trees that allowed them to denfence toward insects.
Error: denfence Suggestion: defense
Error: resistent Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: He suggests decline of the yellow cedar accures in mainlands and islands, but there are no bears in islands.
Error: accures Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Finally, the author mentions that changing in the climate affected the root systems of the yellow cedar and causes them to be freezed.
Error: freezed Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
Read a good grammar book.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 13 12
No. of Words: 265 250
No. of Characters: 1259 1200
No. of Different Words: 123 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.035 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.751 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.223 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 33 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 14 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.385 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.353 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.923 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.368 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.595 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.141 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 296, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...nds, but there are no bears in islands. Thus the bears are not responsible for decre...
^^^^
Line 5, column 346, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ears are not responsible for decreasing the the yellow cedar. Finally, the author me...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 346, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ears are not responsible for decreasing the the yellow cedar. Finally, the author me...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 340, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'warmer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: warmer
...evations while the lower elevations are more warmer than higher elevation. Furthermore, the...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'in contrast', 'first of all', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.249134948097 0.261695866417 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.134948096886 0.158904122519 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.100346020761 0.0723426182421 139% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0449826989619 0.0435111971325 103% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0242214532872 0.0277247811725 87% => OK
Prepositions: 0.121107266436 0.128828473217 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0346020761246 0.0370669169778 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.29630005618 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0207612456747 0.0208969081088 99% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.159169550173 0.128158765124 124% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.0158828679856 0% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00692041522491 0.0114777025283 60% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1558.0 1645.83664459 95% => OK
No of words: 265.0 271.125827815 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.87924528302 6.08160592843 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.04852973271 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.366037735849 0.374372842146 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.260377358491 0.287516216867 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.154716981132 0.187439937562 83% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0679245283019 0.113142543107 60% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29630005618 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475471698113 0.539623497131 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 44.6087420702 53.8517498576 83% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0529801325 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.3846153846 21.7502111507 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0449618618 49.3711431718 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.846153846 132.220823453 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 21.7502111507 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.923076923077 0.878197800319 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.39072847682 118% => OK
Readability: 46.4223512337 50.5018328374 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.98305084746 1.90840788429 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.742710519367 0.549887131256 135% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.170693003823 0.142949733639 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0745683052733 0.0787303798458 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.681395341367 0.631733273073 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.135135094285 0.139662658121 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.40224126495 0.266732575781 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115235729759 0.103435571967 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.441750837622 0.414875509568 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0899120693523 0.0530846634433 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.57251581929 0.40443939384 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573035086419 0.0528353158467 108% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.26048565121 23% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 3.62251655629 221% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.1766004415 31% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.2958057395 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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