Tpo 18 - question 1

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Tpo 18 - question 1

Submitted by apply2017 on Mon, 08/15/2016 - 18:53

The article states that Torreya taxifoha ,a kind of evergreen tree, is has declined in number, and soon become extinct. The passage provides three solution to save this plant; however, the professor explains that none of these solutions are accpetable, and refutes each one of them.

First, the reading states that Torreya taxifoha could be reestablished in the same microclimate which has been growing for thousands of years. Microclimate is an area which its weather is different from other surrouinding areas. The proffesor refutes this point by saying that it's a useless thing to do, because microclimates are changing, and are being affected by other things, such as the global warming issues and those stuff. Everywhere is becoming more dried, so it can't be guarentied that Torreya taxifoha can thrive again in these places.

Second, the article writes that this plant, Torreya taxifoha, can be moved to entirely different locations, away from Florida. Its seeds can be planted succesfuly in forests of north, because the tempreture is much coller there. The speaker refutes this point by mentioning that It could be a dangorous thing to do. She bring an ecample of another plant , black loccus, which were moved to north, and this plant spread so quickly that killed lots of other plants that were indanger. This action could have unpredictable outcomes.

Third, the passages assert that in order to save this planet, researchers can plant it in research centers in a closely monitored enviroment. The proffesor, however, says in order to keep a kind of plant in this kinf of enviroment; they should be planted in large scales and in large amounts. Because they are exposed to desiese and research centers don't have this much capacity to hold this amount of plants.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The article states that Torreya taxifoha...
^^^
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...The article states that Torreya taxifoha ,a kind of evergreen tree, is has decline...
^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...table, and refutes each one of them. First, the reading states that Torreya t...
^^^
Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eas. The proffesor refutes this point by saying that its a useless thing to do, b...
^^
Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...esor refutes this point by saying that its a useless thing to do, because microcli...
^^^
Line 3, column 477, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...verywhere is becoming more dried, so it cant be guarentied that Torreya taxifoha can...
^^^^
Line 3, column 477, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...verywhere is becoming more dried, so it cant be guarentied that Torreya taxifoha can...
^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ha can thrive again in these places. Second, the article writes that this pla...
^^^^
Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'brings'.
Suggestion: brings
...t could be a dangorous thing to do. She bring an ecample of another plant , black loc...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 358, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...o. She bring an ecample of another plant , black loccus, which were moved to north...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n could have unpredictable outcomes. Third, the passages assert that in order...
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Line 7, column 354, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...exposed to desiese and research centers dont have this much capacity to hold this am...
^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'kind of', 'such as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.239393939394 0.261695866417 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.181818181818 0.158904122519 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0727272727273 0.0723426182421 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0424242424242 0.0435111971325 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.030303030303 0.0277247811725 109% => OK
Prepositions: 0.124242424242 0.128828473217 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0545454545455 0.0370669169778 147% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.59134061554 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0272727272727 0.0208969081088 131% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.10303030303 0.128158765124 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0242424242424 0.0158828679856 153% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0121212121212 0.0114777025283 106% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1792.0 1645.83664459 109% => OK
No of words: 293.0 271.125827815 108% => OK
Chars per words: 6.11604095563 6.08160592843 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.04852973271 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.389078498294 0.374372842146 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.293515358362 0.287516216867 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.167235494881 0.187439937562 89% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.102389078498 0.113142543107 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59134061554 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 145.348785872 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559726962457 0.539623497131 104% => OK
Word variations: 58.3929064778 53.8517498576 108% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0529801325 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.9285714286 21.7502111507 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0515225365 49.3711431718 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.0 132.220823453 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9285714286 21.7502111507 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.571428571429 0.878197800319 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 3.39072847682 354% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 50.2801072647 50.5018328374 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.64285714286 1.90840788429 86% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.646108002827 0.549887131256 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0978301911095 0.142949733639 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0821173743193 0.0787303798458 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.531347962122 0.631733273073 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.14578625254 0.139662658121 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.25227255193 0.266732575781 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0993491701101 0.103435571967 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.351239282974 0.414875509568 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0248237372875 0.0530846634433 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.449085814991 0.40443939384 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382630333255 0.0528353158467 72% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.26048565121 164% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.49668874172 114% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.62251655629 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 3.1766004415 126% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 10.2958057395 97% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Sentence: The article states that Torreya taxifoha ,a kind of evergreen tree, is has declined in number, and soon become extinct.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb 'to have', present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to is and has

Sentence: She bring an ecample of another plant , black loccus, which were moved to north, and this plant spread so quickly that killed lots of other plants that were indanger.
Description: The fragment She bring an is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace bring with verb, past tense

have this much capacity
have this capacity

Sentence: The passage provides three solution to save this plant; however, the professor explains that none of these solutions are accpetable, and refutes each one of them.
Error: accpetable Suggestion: acceptable

Sentence: Microclimate is an area which its weather is different from other surrouinding areas.
Error: surrouinding Suggestion: surrounding

Sentence: The proffesor refutes this point by saying that it's a useless thing to do, because microclimates are changing, and are being affected by other things, such as the global warming issues and those stuff.
Error: proffesor Suggestion: professor

Sentence: Everywhere is becoming more dried, so it can't be guarentied that Torreya taxifoha can thrive again in these places.
Error: guarentied Suggestion: guaranteed

Sentence: Its seeds can be planted succesfuly in forests of north, because the tempreture is much coller there.
Error: succesfuly Suggestion: successful
Error: tempreture Suggestion: temperature
Error: coller Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: The speaker refutes this point by mentioning that It could be a dangorous thing to do.
Error: dangorous Suggestion: dangerous

Sentence: She bring an ecample of another plant , black loccus, which were moved to north, and this plant spread so quickly that killed lots of other plants that were indanger.
Error: indanger Suggestion: endanger
Error: ecample Suggestion: example
Error: loccus Suggestion: locus

Sentence: Third, the passages assert that in order to save this planet, researchers can plant it in research centers in a closely monitored enviroment.
Error: enviroment Suggestion: environment

Sentence: The proffesor, however, says in order to keep a kind of plant in this kinf of enviroment; they should be planted in large scales and in large amounts.
Error: proffesor Suggestion: professor
Error: enviroment Suggestion: environment
Error: kinf Suggestion: king

Sentence: Because they are exposed to desiese and research centers don't have this much capacity to hold this amount of plants.
Error: desiese Suggestion: desire

flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
No. of Sentences: 14 12
No. of Words: 293 250
No. of Characters: 1442 1200
No. of Different Words: 163 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.137 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.922 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.512 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.929 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.819 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.069 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4