The author states that humans arrived in the Kaliko island about 7000 years ago, and within 3000 years most of the large mammal species that lived in the forest of kaliko island has become extinct. Author states that the extinction of the large mammals is caused definitely by some natural calamities that occur on the kaliko island. Author provides premise for his conclusion. But the premise is inadequate to conclude the cause that extinctions is caused only by the climatic change or other environmental factor.
First of all the author makes a vague statement that within 3000 years 'most' large mammals species have become extinct but fails to mention the number of species that have become extinct. If the species that have been extinct are mostly the one whose flesh or body is useful for nomadic tribes living on the kaliko island then authors claim proves to be fallacious. Author also fails to state the initial and current condition of the kaliko island. If the condition of kaliko island is degraded by the natural disaster then author claim seems to be plausible. But if the condition of the island is not deteriorated then author claim can be easily proved false.
Author also does not state the type of large animals which lived on the island. If more amphibians lived on the island then it might be the case that they have migrated to other island due to human intervention on the island. Moreover, author fails to state the strong evidence that prove that humans had no significant contact with the mammals. It may be the case that human had significant contact with large mammals and less with the small mammals. Having no significant contact does not prove that human were not engaged in hunting the mammals. As kaliko is a island people living there may be more dependent on large mammals for food, mammal skin for clothing and other purposes.
To make his claim prove strong author states that archaeologist have discovered numerous sites where the bones of fish has been found, but tehy did not found bones of large mammals. But author fails to take into consideration the location of such sites. If archaeologist have only excavated the sites near the sea shore then chances of finding the fish bones is obviously more. The hunting may be taking place in the deep forests of kaliko island.
Author also fails to take into consideration that if the extinction of the large mammals was only due to the climatic conditions and environmental it would definitely affect the human species. But author does not takes into account the census of the human population on the island after 3000 years. If human population has also reduced on the island the author claim that natural calamity has affected the large mammals who be more plausible.
In sum, the author's argument is supported by inadequate premises and unsubstantiated assumption that render his conclusion invalid. If the author truly hopes to to prove his point to the reader, he should provide some more strong evidences in the argument, clearly explicate his assumption and provide more data. Without this things, his poorly reasoned argument will likely convince only few people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'mammals'' or 'mammal's'?
Suggestion: mammals'; mammal's
...ement that within 3000 years most large mammals species have become extinct but fails t...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...current condition of the kaliko island. If the condition of kaliko island is degra...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...arge animals which lived on the island. If more amphibians lived on the island the...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ed in hunting the mammals. As kaliko is a island people living there may be more ...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nsideration the location of such sites. If archaeologist have only excavated the s...
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Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'take'
Suggestion: take
... the human species. But author does not takes into account the census of the human po...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ulation on the island after 3000 years. If human population has also reduced on th...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...s who be more plausible. In sum, the authors argument is supported by inadequate pre...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...sion invalid. If the author truly hopes to to prove his point to the reader, he shoul...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...sumption and provide more data. Without this things, his poorly reasoned argument wi...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.26148409894 0.25644967241 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.166077738516 0.15541462614 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.106007067138 0.0836205057962 127% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0636042402827 0.0520304965353 122% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0194346289753 0.0272364105082 71% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125441696113 0.125424944231 100% => OK
Participles: 0.047703180212 0.0416121511921 115% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.44841747353 2.79052419416 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0265017667845 0.026700313972 99% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.104240282686 0.113004496875 92% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0141342756184 0.0255425247493 55% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0159010600707 0.0127820249294 124% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3167.0 2731.13054187 116% => OK
No of words: 533.0 446.07635468 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.94183864916 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.57801047555 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.363977485929 0.378187486979 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.225140712946 0.287650121315 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.133208255159 0.208842608468 64% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0844277673546 0.135150697306 62% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44841747353 2.79052419416 88% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 207.018472906 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.403377110694 0.469332199767 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.4881062095 52.1807786196 89% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 21.32 23.2022227129 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9898273395 57.7814097925 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.68 141.986410481 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.32 23.2022227129 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.36 0.724660767414 50% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 3.58251231527 279% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 43.8340712946 51.9672348444 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.74468085106 1.8405768891 95% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.50026777254 0.441005458295 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.166444320361 0.135418324435 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.108678956039 0.0829849096947 131% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.597639070626 0.58762219726 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.143289853652 0.147661913831 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.213045486161 0.193483328276 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124180511261 0.0970749176394 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.443692121 0.42659136922 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.113241744938 0.0774707102158 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.342309692705 0.312017818177 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104907618192 0.0698173142475 150% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.87684729064 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.82389162562 212% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 14.657635468 130% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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