Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
In general, the statement is one of the major considerations of many people including my family members. Some may hold the view that selecting a new job for children is better. I, however, after thinking about this on many occasions, decided to stand up in contrast with this opinion. Providing the following reasons to support my idea is crucial.
The first important factor that comes to mind is that in this way children may earn more money easier. Since parents know their job difficulties, they may guide their children during their career. It is notable that children be more successful, if they face with fewer problems during work times. So, they can make more money easier because they know what they should do in order to be proficient one in their job. I guess that a small example can give some light on this matter. Imagine, a boy who works in a job which is completely known for him. It would seem to me that he can crack all of difficulties without unknown challenges. Hence he may gain more money in a simple way.
Another significant reason involved in this issue is that in this way youngsters may be independent earlier. Due to the fact that children can continue their adults’ job, they don't need to find a job opportunity. It is worth noting that these kinds of children start to work earlier than others and they earn their own money.Hence, by these words a person who continues their parent’s career has a chance to make their personal life soon and be an independent one. I think that there is not a better example than my friend who does the same work with his father. He works at his parent’s shopping center and as I know he started to work when he was a teenager.Moreover, He is able to manage his life alone in every aspects.
Admittedly, there are some justifications by someones who argues that people should obtain a new job for their life that is different form parents’ work. In these kinds of peoples opinion, everyone should experience new difficulties during life to learn new things and be successful. In contrary, still I confirm that children achieve to prosperity, if they do something which that is familiar to them. I mean that in this way people may learn new thing through their adults advice. For example, I know a lot of young men and women who they work with their parents and they are always pleased and successful and they are learning beneficial things through their parents’ guild lines.
In sum, from above dissscussed essential points, reaching the conclusion that, lasting adults occupation is a chance for children to thrive, is marked.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'holds'.
Suggestion: holds
...e including my family members. Some may hold the view that selecting a new job for c...
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Line 2, column 635, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ifficulties without unknown challenges. Hence he may gain more money in a simple way....
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Line 2, column 664, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a simple way" with adverb for "simple"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...hallenges. Hence he may gain more money in a simple way. Another significant reason involved i...
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Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...n continue their adults' job, they dont need to find a job opportunity. It is w...
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Line 3, column 330, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hence
...an others and they earn their own money.Hence, by these words a person who continues ...
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Line 3, column 675, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Moreover
... started to work when he was a teenager.Moreover, He is able to manage his life alone in...
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Line 5, column 88, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
..., reaching the conclusion that, lasting adults occupation is a chance for children to ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'for example', 'i guess', 'i mean', 'i think', 'in contrast', 'in general']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.221789883268 0.229887763892 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.161478599222 0.158761421928 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0894941634241 0.0866891130778 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0214007782101 0.046263068375 46% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0933852140078 0.0685040099705 136% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.124513618677 0.118717715034 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0233463035019 0.0351676179071 66% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.73714376421 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0291828793774 0.0309702414327 94% => OK
Particles: 0.00194552529183 0.00188951952338 103% => OK
Determiners: 0.0758754863813 0.0887237588012 86% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0272373540856 0.0209618222197 130% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0214007782101 0.0139019557991 154% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2620.0 2387.08602151 110% => OK
No of words: 454.0 408.028673835 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.77092511013 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.297356828194 0.338922669872 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.224669603524 0.251872472559 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.15859030837 0.174417080927 91% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0925110132159 0.112833075102 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73714376421 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517621145374 0.524397521467 99% => OK
Word variations: 59.8489269253 59.2087087015 101% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.7391304348 20.5533526081 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5634289466 48.84282405 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.913043478 120.699889404 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7391304348 20.5533526081 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.608695652174 0.644075263715 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 42.2060907872 45.7405998639 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.33802816901 1.45489161554 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352919121439 0.300154397459 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0754193779974 0.103427244359 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0524044568033 0.0752933317313 70% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.455936611462 0.497263757937 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.152689081708 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121763815034 0.114077575197 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698560931308 0.0781384742642 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.301125755789 0.336927656856 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.111736954398 0.067059652881 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223992710455 0.210909579961 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464087036883 0.0618886996521 75% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.